for The Guardian7/7/2009 c5 Kirhava
Hello!
I loved your story! Anica is so strong, so ingenious!
I'm looking forward to read the sequel... I'll review it too, you can conunt on it.
Hello!
I loved your story! Anica is so strong, so ingenious!
I'm looking forward to read the sequel... I'll review it too, you can conunt on it.
7/1/2009 c2 
11Fay Diablo
Hah, I love this-
"They clearly respected the guardian and its sacred space. And then I had to go and set up a meth lab here."
11Fay DiabloHah, I love this-
"They clearly respected the guardian and its sacred space. And then I had to go and set up a meth lab here."
7/1/2009 c1 Fay Diablo
This is awesome...
And I'm sure I would have a longer, more interesting to read review on a different day.
But, it is awesome.
This is awesome...
And I'm sure I would have a longer, more interesting to read review on a different day.
But, it is awesome.
6/18/2009 c1 meowza
This is just lovely. I was hooked on this story when I read the very first sentence. You're amazing at details, and I already really like the narrator. Grand job, I can't wait to read the rest!
This is just lovely. I was hooked on this story when I read the very first sentence. You're amazing at details, and I already really like the narrator. Grand job, I can't wait to read the rest!
5/11/2009 c5 Tawny Owl
Yey, she made it. I did like Anica, despite her dubious profession. I think it’s because she was scared, but also resourceful and she didn’t give up. It was also revealing to see the chinks in her armour appear with regards to her job, although it did feel more that it was brought on by her current situation more than a crisis or conscious.
I would have liked a bit more background to why the dragon was set to guard that particular church, but that’s just because I’m nosey. You don’t really need it to make the story work. As always I love your description and the detail you put into things.
Yey, she made it. I did like Anica, despite her dubious profession. I think it’s because she was scared, but also resourceful and she didn’t give up. It was also revealing to see the chinks in her armour appear with regards to her job, although it did feel more that it was brought on by her current situation more than a crisis or conscious.
I would have liked a bit more background to why the dragon was set to guard that particular church, but that’s just because I’m nosey. You don’t really need it to make the story work. As always I love your description and the detail you put into things.
5/5/2009 c4 Tawny Owl
What they do with their lives isn’t my responsibility. – Hah, she really is hard. Again, I loved the suspense, and the creative way Anica uses the things in her hand bag, even though they don’t seem to be getting very far. I am starting to hope for a breakthrough, either a way for the dragon to be beaten or a glimpse of sunrise.
What they do with their lives isn’t my responsibility. – Hah, she really is hard. Again, I loved the suspense, and the creative way Anica uses the things in her hand bag, even though they don’t seem to be getting very far. I am starting to hope for a breakthrough, either a way for the dragon to be beaten or a glimpse of sunrise.
4/29/2009 c3 Tawny Owl
I enjoyed the tension of the chase and the way you built up to it. There were some humorous lines in this as well, like gaining a pair of headlights.
The way you’ve handled the dragon is different from a lot of writing I’ve found here as well. It is a great, hulking beast that feels quite intimidating. I think that it helps that it is made of stone, but I enjoy your descriptions of it.
I enjoyed the tension of the chase and the way you built up to it. There were some humorous lines in this as well, like gaining a pair of headlights.
The way you’ve handled the dragon is different from a lot of writing I’ve found here as well. It is a great, hulking beast that feels quite intimidating. I think that it helps that it is made of stone, but I enjoy your descriptions of it.
4/27/2009 c2 Tawny Owl
Ah ha – the nail polish is flammable. That’s cool, and I’m looking forward to seeing how that pans out.
Loved the image of the dragon sitting like a swan as well, and the waiting. It’s more scary having it wait for Anica to come out than having it trash the church.
I enjoyed the way you brought the weather into the chase as well. There was some spine chilling description. Especially in the first paragraph, and the flashes of lightening were very Gothic.
Ah ha – the nail polish is flammable. That’s cool, and I’m looking forward to seeing how that pans out.
Loved the image of the dragon sitting like a swan as well, and the waiting. It’s more scary having it wait for Anica to come out than having it trash the church.
I enjoyed the way you brought the weather into the chase as well. There was some spine chilling description. Especially in the first paragraph, and the flashes of lightening were very Gothic.
4/16/2009 c1 Tawny Owl
Anica comes across as being very hard, and self sufficient. Although mostly because of her saying that it was either this or the drive thru window. You built Gavril and Danut up as substantial characters as well, despite the fact we never properly meet them. Especially Gavril’s knowledge of architecture and his dismissive comment, “Hey, I’ve got to do something. You take forever in the lab.”
Setting it in Romania also made me alert for supernatural shenanigans. Possibly because of the whole Dracula association, and the idea of big old forest with superstitious peasants lurking on their edges. Is that why you chose it, or is their another reason? The Gothic church was responsible for the majority of the suspense because with a setting like that you know something is going to happen.
The opening line dropped me straight into the story as well, and you have a very comforting way of describing things. I’m not sure that’s the right word, but whenever I read your stuff I always get such a good picture of the scenery I feel like I’m wrapped up in it.
Anica comes across as being very hard, and self sufficient. Although mostly because of her saying that it was either this or the drive thru window. You built Gavril and Danut up as substantial characters as well, despite the fact we never properly meet them. Especially Gavril’s knowledge of architecture and his dismissive comment, “Hey, I’ve got to do something. You take forever in the lab.”
Setting it in Romania also made me alert for supernatural shenanigans. Possibly because of the whole Dracula association, and the idea of big old forest with superstitious peasants lurking on their edges. Is that why you chose it, or is their another reason? The Gothic church was responsible for the majority of the suspense because with a setting like that you know something is going to happen.
The opening line dropped me straight into the story as well, and you have a very comforting way of describing things. I’m not sure that’s the right word, but whenever I read your stuff I always get such a good picture of the scenery I feel like I’m wrapped up in it.
12/24/2008 c4 27Alanna Lioness
Wo. Good chapter. :) I don't really have anything to comment on this time around. Is this the end or are you going to write more? Thanks for the great review on Lifeblood though! That means alot to me. I replied to it in my 'A Few Last Words' note at the end of the story if you didn't see that. Thanks again!
27Alanna LionessWo. Good chapter. :) I don't really have anything to comment on this time around. Is this the end or are you going to write more? Thanks for the great review on Lifeblood though! That means alot to me. I replied to it in my 'A Few Last Words' note at the end of the story if you didn't see that. Thanks again!
12/17/2008 c3 JaveHarron
A pretty intense story you have here. My one question is why the narrator has enough time to bandage the wound. The pace so far has been frantic and panicked with little 'rest time.'
A pretty intense story you have here. My one question is why the narrator has enough time to bandage the wound. The pace so far has been frantic and panicked with little 'rest time.'
12/16/2008 c3 Alanna Lioness
Hm. A few questions about the end. So the creature lunges at her and slashes her leg, but then what? Where does it go/do next? It also seems a bit strange to me that she'd have time to bandage herself up. And a wound like that would hurt horribly.
Once again (and I appologize for this) but I can get extremely picky as you probably noticed from my other two reviews, and I found a picky detail to pick at. . Sorry. If she's trying to be quiet so as to avoid the creature's notice, tearing her shirt doesn't seem to be such a great idea. Cloth tearing has a very audible, recognizable sound. I can't think of what should use instead that would be as good though... A sock maybe? Hahaha.
A last minute tip.- Try adding more detail. It will increase chapter length and make your story more interesting. I also find that while I'm adding detail I think of more things that I should mention or catch any plot holes I might have over looked before.
Hm. A few questions about the end. So the creature lunges at her and slashes her leg, but then what? Where does it go/do next? It also seems a bit strange to me that she'd have time to bandage herself up. And a wound like that would hurt horribly.
Once again (and I appologize for this) but I can get extremely picky as you probably noticed from my other two reviews, and I found a picky detail to pick at. . Sorry. If she's trying to be quiet so as to avoid the creature's notice, tearing her shirt doesn't seem to be such a great idea. Cloth tearing has a very audible, recognizable sound. I can't think of what should use instead that would be as good though... A sock maybe? Hahaha.
A last minute tip.- Try adding more detail. It will increase chapter length and make your story more interesting. I also find that while I'm adding detail I think of more things that I should mention or catch any plot holes I might have over looked before.