for Questions for a classmate12/28/2009 c1 
5CuriousContradiction
Ahh. I just noticed that my review on your other piece "The Supreme Irony of Life" was cut off. Sigh.
But onto this one!
Definitely one of the more relatable works on fictionpress. I think that most girls think of this when they're not at school. (I don't know if it's the same for you, but um... I'll admit that if the boy is in a class, even if that class sucks, the fact that he's there makes the class a lot more endurable. This might sound weird too, but you might almost... look forward to going to school because you know you get to see him. Is that stalker? Hahaha.)
One tiny little thing: The second "it's" should be "its" because it's not a contraction of "it" and "is." Not a huge deal though.
But yeah. These exact thoughts run through my head my head too, even if I'm at school and not home sick. Surprising how you can combine all of these thoughts and condense everything into such a thoughtful paragraph. Good work. Thanks for writing this. :)
5CuriousContradictionAhh. I just noticed that my review on your other piece "The Supreme Irony of Life" was cut off. Sigh.
But onto this one!
Definitely one of the more relatable works on fictionpress. I think that most girls think of this when they're not at school. (I don't know if it's the same for you, but um... I'll admit that if the boy is in a class, even if that class sucks, the fact that he's there makes the class a lot more endurable. This might sound weird too, but you might almost... look forward to going to school because you know you get to see him. Is that stalker? Hahaha.)
One tiny little thing: The second "it's" should be "its" because it's not a contraction of "it" and "is." Not a huge deal though.
But yeah. These exact thoughts run through my head my head too, even if I'm at school and not home sick. Surprising how you can combine all of these thoughts and condense everything into such a thoughtful paragraph. Good work. Thanks for writing this. :)
12/20/2009 c1 4HighOnBrokenWings
That was really good.
I love the way you've portrayed that wonder.
Very clever. You're a really good writer, especially when it comes to those end of the story revelations.
All the questions worked awesomely.
I still really think that ending is blimin awesome.
4HighOnBrokenWingsThat was really good.
I love the way you've portrayed that wonder.
Very clever. You're a really good writer, especially when it comes to those end of the story revelations.
All the questions worked awesomely.
I still really think that ending is blimin awesome.
2/7/2009 c1 216stolen hugs
...this sounded like me yesterday! :)
dang, this is exactly like me and my current crush.
awesome job!
-anna.
216stolen hugs...this sounded like me yesterday! :)
dang, this is exactly like me and my current crush.
awesome job!
-anna.
1/26/2009 c1 2PocketofChange
I really, really loved this. It perfectly displays what every girl who has had a crush feels every day, not just when they are sick! Haha. Your voice is so easy to connect to and that is the sign of a great writer, even if you don't think that your grammar is that great. So, keep up the great work and remember, the only way to improve is to keep writing, so keep it up and I know that your voice will become more developed and with time you will be the best writer you can be (you're all ready pretty dang good, though!)
PEACE.
PocketofChange
2PocketofChangeI really, really loved this. It perfectly displays what every girl who has had a crush feels every day, not just when they are sick! Haha. Your voice is so easy to connect to and that is the sign of a great writer, even if you don't think that your grammar is that great. So, keep up the great work and remember, the only way to improve is to keep writing, so keep it up and I know that your voice will become more developed and with time you will be the best writer you can be (you're all ready pretty dang good, though!)
PEACE.
PocketofChange
12/5/2008 c1 Angie angie
I really enjoyed reading this, because I think the same things when I stay home.
I really enjoyed reading this, because I think the same things when I stay home.