for Boy, Girl12/22/2008 c1 
25moon-behind-dark-clouds
i really like the style of the poem. quite simple but the rhyming makes it very effective. awesome work
25moon-behind-dark-cloudsi really like the style of the poem. quite simple but the rhyming makes it very effective. awesome work
12/6/2008 c1 84tehlessthan3of0scoreintennis
wow~ a little confusing, but the rhythm was awesome. great job. =]
84tehlessthan3of0scoreintenniswow~ a little confusing, but the rhythm was awesome. great job. =]
12/6/2008 c1 Xila
o0o I really like your style of writing!
=]
o0o I really like your style of writing!
=]
12/6/2008 c1 May Elizabeth
I actually really like the flow of this poem, i liked the choppiness. I like the simple descriptions of the poem.
A suggestion:
1. This poem would prolly have more impact if placed into stanzas. Experiment and see which one works for you.
Peace.
I actually really like the flow of this poem, i liked the choppiness. I like the simple descriptions of the poem.
A suggestion:
1. This poem would prolly have more impact if placed into stanzas. Experiment and see which one works for you.
Peace.