for Mephisto12/8/2008 c1 Equilibrium
Beautifully written! Excellent juxtapostion of time frames, superb vocabulary (you've really improved!), great descriptions that really manage to capture the darker overtones of this story, and great use of single-line paragraphs. And, as always, a very unique cast of characters.
You're beginning to scare me. In fact, keep this up, and I'm going to start getting pretty demoralized. But keep it up anyway! ^.^
Beautifully written! Excellent juxtapostion of time frames, superb vocabulary (you've really improved!), great descriptions that really manage to capture the darker overtones of this story, and great use of single-line paragraphs. And, as always, a very unique cast of characters.
You're beginning to scare me. In fact, keep this up, and I'm going to start getting pretty demoralized. But keep it up anyway! ^.^