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1/11/2009 c1 1Clandestine's Pen
for the forum: review traders

- "utmost best", a bit redundant, i think but it can also be taken as an exaggeration, so it's okay.

- “I am truly sorry for your loss but Mr. Whiteman, even one such as I cannot bend the law at my own bidding. Please sign.”, you lack a "," before Mr. Whiteman as a sign that you referred to the person.

- this is where i end my review for "forum: review traders"

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my personal review:

aside from what i wrote above, i really thought the story was great!

i really do!

Miss Ronan was very harsh! i love it!

:)
1/6/2009 c1 Chancee
Okay I am going to get on your case. Why have you not finished this? HM? You don't have to answer me since you can't hear me but, this started out great. What happen? Another block? Well I will give you a pass to work on Addiction and I will look to see where this story goes as well. I am going to have to keep my eye on you! I hope Miss Ronan breaks a hill!

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