for My Guiding Light4/3/2010 c1 
5Penn Dalies
A lot of imagery in this one. I was seeing some theology, such as christianity and buddhism. But that's just me. Some lanterns and forest paths were appearing when you said "I'm looking for something to brighten the route," and "I'm looking, I'm desperate for just one small glow," It was hopeful but at the same time it seemed stressed. Whatever guidance you were needing or looking for I hope you have it now. =]
5Penn DaliesA lot of imagery in this one. I was seeing some theology, such as christianity and buddhism. But that's just me. Some lanterns and forest paths were appearing when you said "I'm looking for something to brighten the route," and "I'm looking, I'm desperate for just one small glow," It was hopeful but at the same time it seemed stressed. Whatever guidance you were needing or looking for I hope you have it now. =]
2/14/2010 c1 16SarahMerriman
I like the rhythem of this poem. It is very easy to get into and I think a lot of people will be able to identify with it. So many people search for reasons, for things to help them understand and get through life.
My favorite part is:
"To steer me the right way so I’ll understand
How things so minute can become things so grand."
All in all, this is a nice take on the situation. Good job. Keep writing :) .
16SarahMerrimanI like the rhythem of this poem. It is very easy to get into and I think a lot of people will be able to identify with it. So many people search for reasons, for things to help them understand and get through life.
My favorite part is:
"To steer me the right way so I’ll understand
How things so minute can become things so grand."
All in all, this is a nice take on the situation. Good job. Keep writing :) .
11/6/2009 c1 8Daisy's Quill
Frustration and hope are the two main feelings I get when I read this poem. I like it. The rhyming is my favorite part, as there are not many great poems that are serious but rhyme decently. Thank you for posting this, m' dear. Also, thank you for your advice on my poem.
8Daisy's QuillFrustration and hope are the two main feelings I get when I read this poem. I like it. The rhyming is my favorite part, as there are not many great poems that are serious but rhyme decently. Thank you for posting this, m' dear. Also, thank you for your advice on my poem.
9/5/2009 c1 fleur de l'est
Good use of repetition, the continuous state of searching really highlights the sense of loss.
Good use of repetition, the continuous state of searching really highlights the sense of loss.
8/3/2009 c1 26Mirabella
A fellow rhymer!
Lovely poem, you are talented. I loved to read through this and see the story beneath unfold. :)
26MirabellaA fellow rhymer!
Lovely poem, you are talented. I loved to read through this and see the story beneath unfold. :)
7/24/2009 c1 16Rocki Smith
Wow, I really like this one! I can feel a purpose as I read. I can also feel the way you move from being lost to a sort of assurance at the very end. Great word choice in places. Well done!
16Rocki SmithWow, I really like this one! I can feel a purpose as I read. I can also feel the way you move from being lost to a sort of assurance at the very end. Great word choice in places. Well done!
4/28/2009 c1 6Past Prototype
Another poem that I feel...connected? to. One that reminds me of me...
I suppose my friends are my light...but they never seem to notice that and keep going on ahead without me...never helping me up when I fall...and yet I still blindly follow and love them...why?
Even while they refuse to hold me or refuse to help me or refuse me...even when I am completely rebuked...I still cannot help but follow them to the ends of the Earth...
Such melancholy...
ja ne
6Past PrototypeAnother poem that I feel...connected? to. One that reminds me of me...
I suppose my friends are my light...but they never seem to notice that and keep going on ahead without me...never helping me up when I fall...and yet I still blindly follow and love them...why?
Even while they refuse to hold me or refuse to help me or refuse me...even when I am completely rebuked...I still cannot help but follow them to the ends of the Earth...
Such melancholy...
ja ne
4/17/2009 c1 1derli
Your poem mirrors my own feelings and thoughts. I believe these words echo in the hearts of many. It was a pleasure reading your poem.
1derliYour poem mirrors my own feelings and thoughts. I believe these words echo in the hearts of many. It was a pleasure reading your poem.
4/17/2009 c1 353Louis Denair
I like the flow and the contrast between light and dark. Good
emotional piece.
353Louis DenairI like the flow and the contrast between light and dark. Good
emotional piece.
4/8/2009 c1 189oxytocin
The rhyming scheme is good, but the central idea is pretty unoriginal. It introduces no context, no real imagery or poetical devices and we can infer nothing intriguing from the voice of the poem. The rhyming, however, and the persistent light imagery throughout keep a consistent feel to the poem, but it still remains very bland.
189oxytocinThe rhyming scheme is good, but the central idea is pretty unoriginal. It introduces no context, no real imagery or poetical devices and we can infer nothing intriguing from the voice of the poem. The rhyming, however, and the persistent light imagery throughout keep a consistent feel to the poem, but it still remains very bland.