for My Guiding Light12/28/2008 c1 
8you are not a pretty snowflake
This one is definitely my favorite of your pieces. The rhyme pattern is excellent
8you are not a pretty snowflakeThis one is definitely my favorite of your pieces. The rhyme pattern is excellent
12/28/2008 c1 173Little girl Big world
The rhyming is good and so is the rhythm. I like the subject this piece is about because it's different and it seems like a lot of people could relate to it. There's kind of a desperation to find something to help you along and its shown well in the poem. Good job-
173Little girl Big worldThe rhyming is good and so is the rhythm. I like the subject this piece is about because it's different and it seems like a lot of people could relate to it. There's kind of a desperation to find something to help you along and its shown well in the poem. Good job-
12/28/2008 c1 mooneyed
Oh, I like this.
I like the repetition of "i'm looking"
and the desperation and longing evident in the lines...
Very nice.
Oh, I like this.
I like the repetition of "i'm looking"
and the desperation and longing evident in the lines...
Very nice.
12/24/2008 c1 95lever du soleil
I like this poem. It isn't as dark as the others. It has a sense of urgency to it. I particularly like the second stanza.
95lever du soleilI like this poem. It isn't as dark as the others. It has a sense of urgency to it. I particularly like the second stanza.
12/14/2008 c1 Cynically In Love
This poem is really inspirational... I'll be sure to try and remember this whenever I'm going through a hard time! =]
This poem is really inspirational... I'll be sure to try and remember this whenever I'm going through a hard time! =]
12/9/2008 c1 102The Hippie Nerd
I really like the flow and rhyme here, both are pulled off quite well. The sense of yearning is very strong, and it all feels like an honest plea in the middle of the night for a guiding light. Some of my favourite lines:
"How things so minute can become things so grand" (my favourite- poetic, deep and not totally obvious in meaning, lovely, and one of those lines that makes you think)
"I'll follow it if I am given the chance" (I can feel the hopelessness in a way, the desire for the light)
"A light that will help me to get through my life" (that want becomes a strong need, I like that)
Good job!
102The Hippie NerdI really like the flow and rhyme here, both are pulled off quite well. The sense of yearning is very strong, and it all feels like an honest plea in the middle of the night for a guiding light. Some of my favourite lines:
"How things so minute can become things so grand" (my favourite- poetic, deep and not totally obvious in meaning, lovely, and one of those lines that makes you think)
"I'll follow it if I am given the chance" (I can feel the hopelessness in a way, the desire for the light)
"A light that will help me to get through my life" (that want becomes a strong need, I like that)
Good job!