for A River in Egypt7/4/2009 c8 Subconscious-Flirt
Fast update! And I'm glad you did, I'm really getting into this story. Gareth is a pretty great character... I don't like the name all that much, but he's great so I'll forgetabout it. Jonty sounds cute, though. Anyhow, can't wait for the next update!
Fast update! And I'm glad you did, I'm really getting into this story. Gareth is a pretty great character... I don't like the name all that much, but he's great so I'll forgetabout it. Jonty sounds cute, though. Anyhow, can't wait for the next update!
7/4/2009 c8 
23frogs of war
I love these two. Poor boys, it's going to get worse before it gets better.
23frogs of warI love these two. Poor boys, it's going to get worse before it gets better.
7/3/2009 c7 frogs of war
It's been a while since I read the other chapters, but the first paragraph gave me all the clues I needed to remember what was going on. Good job.
I totally feel for Jonty. You bring his thoughts and emotions out well. I think this looking back view is a great way to tell this story. Otherwise Jonty wouldn't be half so much fun.
It's been a while since I read the other chapters, but the first paragraph gave me all the clues I needed to remember what was going on. Good job.
I totally feel for Jonty. You bring his thoughts and emotions out well. I think this looking back view is a great way to tell this story. Otherwise Jonty wouldn't be half so much fun.
7/2/2009 c7 4Amindaya
Holy smokes Batman!
Great chapter. I love how you describe Jonty's thoughts when he saw Gareth. Very realistic thought process, I think.
4AmindayaHoly smokes Batman!
Great chapter. I love how you describe Jonty's thoughts when he saw Gareth. Very realistic thought process, I think.
7/2/2009 c7 Subconscious-Flirt
Haha, I forgot about this story, had to reread it and thenr ead the new chapter, but I totally like it. Again. Specially the style. How they both comment on whatever the other one wrote in the chapter before. Nice. Creative. Udpdate soon :D
Haha, I forgot about this story, had to reread it and thenr ead the new chapter, but I totally like it. Again. Specially the style. How they both comment on whatever the other one wrote in the chapter before. Nice. Creative. Udpdate soon :D
6/18/2009 c6 1I'll Follow You
This is awesome.
You must continue.
In fact, I order you to continue. ;)
1I'll Follow YouThis is awesome.
You must continue.
In fact, I order you to continue. ;)
6/18/2009 c5 I'll Follow You
Ahaha.
I laughed and cried.
And then laughed and cried some more.
That song was effing genius.
"I want to come all over your belly!"
Hahahaha.
GENIUS.
I don't know about their school but ppl at my school would've thought it was ace.
This story's very different from Nerves but I love it too! I especially love how they're telling their story together with some hilarious commentary.
Ahaha.
I laughed and cried.
And then laughed and cried some more.
That song was effing genius.
"I want to come all over your belly!"
Hahahaha.
GENIUS.
I don't know about their school but ppl at my school would've thought it was ace.
This story's very different from Nerves but I love it too! I especially love how they're telling their story together with some hilarious commentary.
6/7/2009 c6 8Serenity Marie
Hahaha! Oh wow, you are a great story teller. This story has had me laughing and laughing. It is so amazing how real the characters feel. How real it all feels to the reader...I half expect Gareth to walk by me in high heels while I sit here and read the story.
You are an amazing writer. Thank you.
-Marie
8Serenity MarieHahaha! Oh wow, you are a great story teller. This story has had me laughing and laughing. It is so amazing how real the characters feel. How real it all feels to the reader...I half expect Gareth to walk by me in high heels while I sit here and read the story.
You are an amazing writer. Thank you.
-Marie
5/1/2009 c6 Li
Great story! You have a gift for voice. Your characters are funny and endearing. I am dying to read more!
Great story! You have a gift for voice. Your characters are funny and endearing. I am dying to read more!
3/27/2009 c6 9Tigaroo
How could I have completely missed the fact that YOU wrote this one as well?
Love it by the way.
9TigarooHow could I have completely missed the fact that YOU wrote this one as well?
Love it by the way.
3/15/2009 c6 Slate
Quite fabulous! It's funny; it's original; it's addictive. I like the format you've chosen for the story as well. Keep up the good work.
Quite fabulous! It's funny; it's original; it's addictive. I like the format you've chosen for the story as well. Keep up the good work.
2/16/2009 c6 23frogs of war
I love Gareth "...a man wearing eyeliner, sequins and their sister’s jeans"
23frogs of warI love Gareth "...a man wearing eyeliner, sequins and their sister’s jeans"
2/14/2009 c5 frogs of war
I love the two different sides of the same situation stories. I think these two complement each other very well. I want to know what happened next.
I love the two different sides of the same situation stories. I think these two complement each other very well. I want to know what happened next.