for To Feel the Sun8/18/2009 c8 Jainblu
Gosh Jonah and Simon... tehe.. men!
It did flow effortlessly, in my mind, as i was reading it... okay...
insensible - nonsensical?
I dont know.. dont think im making sense either way, and im sure insensible, is not the same thing as being silly, sure it has more to do with being unaware of peoples feelings.
oh dont mind me whilst i ramble on in the space in which im supposed to be reviewing :P
Gosh Jonah and Simon... tehe.. men!
It did flow effortlessly, in my mind, as i was reading it... okay...
insensible - nonsensical?
I dont know.. dont think im making sense either way, and im sure insensible, is not the same thing as being silly, sure it has more to do with being unaware of peoples feelings.
oh dont mind me whilst i ramble on in the space in which im supposed to be reviewing :P
8/18/2009 c7 Jainblu
aw, don't we all don't we all. lol..
Gosh that takes me back to Bugsy AMlone, even if i was only one of Talullah's girls...
okay sorry probably TMi...
anywho.. i'll just scuttle out of here now.
Really liked this chapter though, my cheeks feel weird from smiling to wide, too much.
aw, don't we all don't we all. lol..
Gosh that takes me back to Bugsy AMlone, even if i was only one of Talullah's girls...
okay sorry probably TMi...
anywho.. i'll just scuttle out of here now.
Really liked this chapter though, my cheeks feel weird from smiling to wide, too much.
8/18/2009 c6 Jainblu
Oh wow. lol
I laughed a lot here.
um.. oh yeah i really loved this bit, when you drew us back to the fact that she was scrubbing grout. for some reason i found it hilarious. and well, im not really sure if you want these reviews or not, you know what with you having finished this story. hmm...
okay chappie dee 7
Oh wow. lol
I laughed a lot here.
um.. oh yeah i really loved this bit, when you drew us back to the fact that she was scrubbing grout. for some reason i found it hilarious. and well, im not really sure if you want these reviews or not, you know what with you having finished this story. hmm...
okay chappie dee 7
8/18/2009 c5 Jainblu
Should have told you before this moment, that you were already succeeding in making Jonah quite a bit of an intriguing character.. to me anyway.
In fact! come to think of it, I do no think i have said much in my previous reviews about how well formed, interesting and beautiful your characters really are. So ill say it now, well i hope that convulted sentence i just typed equates as me saying as much. =]
Chappie dee six woo
Should have told you before this moment, that you were already succeeding in making Jonah quite a bit of an intriguing character.. to me anyway.
In fact! come to think of it, I do no think i have said much in my previous reviews about how well formed, interesting and beautiful your characters really are. So ill say it now, well i hope that convulted sentence i just typed equates as me saying as much. =]
Chappie dee six woo
8/18/2009 c4 Jainblu
Oh my gosh! wow.
I actually love you.
Im actually giggling.
Giggling!
aw. That chapter was so much fun to read, and i really do think you've got a natural flow thing going on. There were a couple of times like twice when i thought two words could have been swapped round and worked better, but that's more because of the way i speak than anything, and they still worked pretty well with the way they were.
so yeah. yippee
Next chappie dee
Oh my gosh! wow.
I actually love you.
Im actually giggling.
Giggling!
aw. That chapter was so much fun to read, and i really do think you've got a natural flow thing going on. There were a couple of times like twice when i thought two words could have been swapped round and worked better, but that's more because of the way i speak than anything, and they still worked pretty well with the way they were.
so yeah. yippee
Next chappie dee
8/18/2009 c3 Jainblu
Lol.
Okay, I loved dthis chapter, i laughed so much, and well i kind of figure that the way you wind the distressing in with the hilarious, is good... because it leaves less room for tears. but our i really think Grace's vulnerability is endearing.
okay enough mushie stuff
Chappie dee 4
Lol.
Okay, I loved dthis chapter, i laughed so much, and well i kind of figure that the way you wind the distressing in with the hilarious, is good... because it leaves less room for tears. but our i really think Grace's vulnerability is endearing.
okay enough mushie stuff
Chappie dee 4
8/18/2009 c2 Jainblu
In response to your authors note... and i'm glad you did =] That is exactly the same way my God Mother's cousin's girls act.. okay yeah talk about degrees of separation, but still. It's refreshing to see a story with twins that isn't completely.. how do i put this, unrealistic.
I like the way you write. I think you're very good at pulling readers into the story, and at the same time giving it dimension as well. Okay well next chappie dee then.
In response to your authors note... and i'm glad you did =] That is exactly the same way my God Mother's cousin's girls act.. okay yeah talk about degrees of separation, but still. It's refreshing to see a story with twins that isn't completely.. how do i put this, unrealistic.
I like the way you write. I think you're very good at pulling readers into the story, and at the same time giving it dimension as well. Okay well next chappie dee then.
8/18/2009 c1 Jainblu
Right off the bat you drew me in. The humour with which you started the story was really effective ^_^ Also I think its kind of interesting how that, contrasts with the metaphorical despair that come straight after it. These aren’t normally thing I think about whilst reading, but for some reason, with your story this thought in particular struck me. Anyhow, I do think you’ve made a very good start, and i’ve had it in mind to review this for ages, ever since I saw a comment you made in like possibly skow or TAD cbox, before I went on holiday. So at least 3 months ago. The point of the matter is that I’m glad I kept to my decision, because you have not disappointed. =]
Also Im glad that the chapter ended with a giggle from me =]
Right off the bat you drew me in. The humour with which you started the story was really effective ^_^ Also I think its kind of interesting how that, contrasts with the metaphorical despair that come straight after it. These aren’t normally thing I think about whilst reading, but for some reason, with your story this thought in particular struck me. Anyhow, I do think you’ve made a very good start, and i’ve had it in mind to review this for ages, ever since I saw a comment you made in like possibly skow or TAD cbox, before I went on holiday. So at least 3 months ago. The point of the matter is that I’m glad I kept to my decision, because you have not disappointed. =]
Also Im glad that the chapter ended with a giggle from me =]
8/14/2009 c19 
6jayniee
I loved this story. Jonah is the man, and I am totally in love with him. I knew from the beginning him and Gracie would end up together.
:D
6jaynieeI loved this story. Jonah is the man, and I am totally in love with him. I knew from the beginning him and Gracie would end up together.
:D
8/14/2009 c14 3Charred Fate
Okay, so I don't usually review, but I had to make an exception. I don't know what came over me, but this chapter made me ball my eyes out. I absolutely love Jonah. Thank you so much for writing this. I adore this story.
3Charred FateOkay, so I don't usually review, but I had to make an exception. I don't know what came over me, but this chapter made me ball my eyes out. I absolutely love Jonah. Thank you so much for writing this. I adore this story.