for To Feel the Sun4/10/2012 c1 All Stories Removed
Hi!
You reviewed my story and I went to respond but couldn't...so instead I'm just going to thank you for you kind words here!
I also feel as though I should inform you that I totally loved this story and it's two sequels (but did you take down the newest one? Regarding her twin sister?)
- Vi
Hi!
You reviewed my story and I went to respond but couldn't...so instead I'm just going to thank you for you kind words here!
I also feel as though I should inform you that I totally loved this story and it's two sequels (but did you take down the newest one? Regarding her twin sister?)
- Vi
4/4/2012 c19 
2lizlively
I LOVED this story! I feel like I connected and could relate so much with Grace, and I fell in love with Jonah! I hope to find myself a guy like that...crossing my fingers!
For revision (if you ever do decide to revise) I feel like more scenes between Grace and Jonah before he confesses his feelings should be added. For example, the one shot you wrote in Jonah's perspective showed there interaction a lot more than in this story. Because of this, the ending between the two felt a little rushed and there didn't seem to be enough of a foundation for Grace to all of a sudden know she is in love with him.
Also, Carlin was such an ASS. You painted him PERFECTLY. You could also add some more back story on how he and Grace became friends, that might actually help villanize him even more because the reader will be able to see how long he has been stringing her along.
But again, I am in love with your characters. They were so well drawn out and perfectly defined that I feel like they were my own friends. Thank you so much for sharing this story, I can't wait to read it again and again and again!
2lizlivelyI LOVED this story! I feel like I connected and could relate so much with Grace, and I fell in love with Jonah! I hope to find myself a guy like that...crossing my fingers!
For revision (if you ever do decide to revise) I feel like more scenes between Grace and Jonah before he confesses his feelings should be added. For example, the one shot you wrote in Jonah's perspective showed there interaction a lot more than in this story. Because of this, the ending between the two felt a little rushed and there didn't seem to be enough of a foundation for Grace to all of a sudden know she is in love with him.
Also, Carlin was such an ASS. You painted him PERFECTLY. You could also add some more back story on how he and Grace became friends, that might actually help villanize him even more because the reader will be able to see how long he has been stringing her along.
But again, I am in love with your characters. They were so well drawn out and perfectly defined that I feel like they were my own friends. Thank you so much for sharing this story, I can't wait to read it again and again and again!
2/15/2012 c1 ellie.o
Hey Aurette,
Read this a little while ago, but saw it on a recommended list and thought I'd finally get around to dropping a quick note to say thanks for sharing this story with us! I really enjoyed reading 'To Feel the Sun'. [I also like the reference to Eponine/Les Miserables] in this first chapter. The title of the story is also great. It is very evocative and I like how strong Gracie's personality comes out through the story.
Keep up the writing! :) And thanks once more.
Hey Aurette,
Read this a little while ago, but saw it on a recommended list and thought I'd finally get around to dropping a quick note to say thanks for sharing this story with us! I really enjoyed reading 'To Feel the Sun'. [I also like the reference to Eponine/Les Miserables] in this first chapter. The title of the story is also great. It is very evocative and I like how strong Gracie's personality comes out through the story.
Keep up the writing! :) And thanks once more.
2/6/2012 c20 MarggiS
I just found this story, and I'm so glad I did! It's amazing, and I am so glad you posted the notice about the sequel! !
I just found this story, and I'm so glad I did! It's amazing, and I am so glad you posted the notice about the sequel! !
1/24/2012 c19 1Flashography
holy shit.
so i read this entire story in like 3 hours and i am now moving on to So Real.
THIS STORY IS FRIGGING AMAZING.
I love the characters, i love the plot, argh i just love everything! I love how you didn't do anything cliche here, the plot was so unique. The characters are so unique AND cute, too! Gracie is just the cutest thing ever and Jonah is so freakishly cute and sweet!
Plus, the ending was perfect.
1Flashographyholy shit.
so i read this entire story in like 3 hours and i am now moving on to So Real.
THIS STORY IS FRIGGING AMAZING.
I love the characters, i love the plot, argh i just love everything! I love how you didn't do anything cliche here, the plot was so unique. The characters are so unique AND cute, too! Gracie is just the cutest thing ever and Jonah is so freakishly cute and sweet!
Plus, the ending was perfect.
1/23/2012 c18 ellie.o
I love the quote that explains the title of the story!
I have read the epilogue, but decided to post my thoughts here.
'To Feel The Sun' is a wonderful story that creates a really approachable character in the protagonist, Gracie. She's quirky and oblivious, with a bad habit for avoiding things but it is her sweet nature that shines through. The leading man is charming in his own way although I did not completely understand his continuous reservation, I did enjoy the moments where his feelings shone through. The love he has for Gracie is wonderful-and I particularly like the companion one-shot which people should also check out.
Some tips for improvement that I would suggest would be about rounding out the other characters a little more. I liked the comraderie between Gracie and Cassie. It was good to see some rapport with Sarah as well. I was surprised Carlin was suddenly terrible, [or maybe i missed the clues] -but it made sense that he would have noticed Gracie's mooning over him. I just can't imagine Gracie being clueless about his 'true' character for that many years!
Overall, I would really like to thank you for sharing this story and hope that you continue to write and share your words with the world. You have made me a fan!
I love the quote that explains the title of the story!
I have read the epilogue, but decided to post my thoughts here.
'To Feel The Sun' is a wonderful story that creates a really approachable character in the protagonist, Gracie. She's quirky and oblivious, with a bad habit for avoiding things but it is her sweet nature that shines through. The leading man is charming in his own way although I did not completely understand his continuous reservation, I did enjoy the moments where his feelings shone through. The love he has for Gracie is wonderful-and I particularly like the companion one-shot which people should also check out.
Some tips for improvement that I would suggest would be about rounding out the other characters a little more. I liked the comraderie between Gracie and Cassie. It was good to see some rapport with Sarah as well. I was surprised Carlin was suddenly terrible, [or maybe i missed the clues] -but it made sense that he would have noticed Gracie's mooning over him. I just can't imagine Gracie being clueless about his 'true' character for that many years!
Overall, I would really like to thank you for sharing this story and hope that you continue to write and share your words with the world. You have made me a fan!
12/24/2011 c19 A Midsummer Night's Dream
Most of traditional folk songs in the world seems to be that way. Depressing. If its not about heroics and such.
It took me a few precious seconds to comprehend what Jonah said and who Grace O'Mara is. It clicked after I finally realized it was Grace. Grace O'Mara.Wife.One year later.Those three facts have to swirl in my head a few more times before I was able to truly comprehend it. Now that was embarrassing. Talk about mental block.
Most of traditional folk songs in the world seems to be that way. Depressing. If its not about heroics and such.
It took me a few precious seconds to comprehend what Jonah said and who Grace O'Mara is. It clicked after I finally realized it was Grace. Grace O'Mara.Wife.One year later.Those three facts have to swirl in my head a few more times before I was able to truly comprehend it. Now that was embarrassing. Talk about mental block.
12/24/2011 c18 A Midsummer Night's Dream
I think I like Devon, bias to the blue hair aside.And Jonah? Jonah's hilarious and cute. Humorous scenes with him really made me laugh. When he watched Grace dumbfounded in a phone call with a certain bastard, I was amused.When he slipped his Starbucks brought coffee in surprise and how he howled after, now that was hilarious.When-Hmmm?...its always with Grace huh. She always bring out the best in him. -smirk- Their moments together were cute. Gracie noting and then later on teasing Jonah about how he'd grown up since he was being much more vulgar in his speech was cute. Grace making a note of stealing Jonah's bathrobe and then really doing was hilarious. "Wait, is that my bathrobe?" I howled in laughter at their moments.
Man, I can't count the number of times I said cute when it comes to our dear lawyer. XD
I think I like Devon, bias to the blue hair aside.And Jonah? Jonah's hilarious and cute. Humorous scenes with him really made me laugh. When he watched Grace dumbfounded in a phone call with a certain bastard, I was amused.When he slipped his Starbucks brought coffee in surprise and how he howled after, now that was hilarious.When-Hmmm?...its always with Grace huh. She always bring out the best in him. -smirk- Their moments together were cute. Gracie noting and then later on teasing Jonah about how he'd grown up since he was being much more vulgar in his speech was cute. Grace making a note of stealing Jonah's bathrobe and then really doing was hilarious. "Wait, is that my bathrobe?" I howled in laughter at their moments.
Man, I can't count the number of times I said cute when it comes to our dear lawyer. XD
12/23/2011 c19 8CrazyCowgirl101
Perfect. And I don't say that lightly. This story has just the right amount of everything-drama, romance, anger, sadness. It's very down to earth and touches things that I think many people have encountered. Especially the issue of deciding if one has feelings for somone else. I've been in those shoes more than I'd care to admit. It was really refreshing that the characters were confused about this. Great job!
8CrazyCowgirl101Perfect. And I don't say that lightly. This story has just the right amount of everything-drama, romance, anger, sadness. It's very down to earth and touches things that I think many people have encountered. Especially the issue of deciding if one has feelings for somone else. I've been in those shoes more than I'd care to admit. It was really refreshing that the characters were confused about this. Great job!
10/3/2011 c19 ohshittae
Because I'd rather read than do something that would lift my grades up, I read two of your stories this weekend, namely To Feel the Sun and So Real. Heh, first and foremost, I want to say that I love it! Although, I was a bit curious as to what happened to Thompson. Keep up the good job! If ever I read it again and find something that might help you improve more, I'll just send you a message. Sorry if this has not been a constructive criticism. Sometimes, I tend to overlook things especially when I'm in a state of having my mind above the clouds which does not happen often. =)
Because I'd rather read than do something that would lift my grades up, I read two of your stories this weekend, namely To Feel the Sun and So Real. Heh, first and foremost, I want to say that I love it! Although, I was a bit curious as to what happened to Thompson. Keep up the good job! If ever I read it again and find something that might help you improve more, I'll just send you a message. Sorry if this has not been a constructive criticism. Sometimes, I tend to overlook things especially when I'm in a state of having my mind above the clouds which does not happen often. =)
9/18/2011 c18 Cheryl White
For the record, I was rooting for Jonah from the start. HAHAHA.
Dayummm! That was too cute for words. HAHA :))
How do you write so smoothly? Seriously, it's amazing. And the suspense from the climax (the evil Carlin part) was overwhelming. I couldn't stop reading after that chappie. :))
And the Carlin scenario was such a twist I had to read that part more than once to wrap my head around it. :| It really added a nice twist to the plot!
Amazing story!
I'm off to read the epilogueee! :))
For the record, I was rooting for Jonah from the start. HAHAHA.
Dayummm! That was too cute for words. HAHA :))
How do you write so smoothly? Seriously, it's amazing. And the suspense from the climax (the evil Carlin part) was overwhelming. I couldn't stop reading after that chappie. :))
And the Carlin scenario was such a twist I had to read that part more than once to wrap my head around it. :| It really added a nice twist to the plot!
Amazing story!
I'm off to read the epilogueee! :))
8/25/2011 c20 leauduciel
can i tell you, i just found your stories now, and i love them. LOVE. i've already read all the sequels as well, and i have to say, your characters just spring out of the text, take a life of their own, and now i wish jonah were real. SIGH. you have a gift, and you use it well. keep writing, and i will definitely keep reading. well done.
can i tell you, i just found your stories now, and i love them. LOVE. i've already read all the sequels as well, and i have to say, your characters just spring out of the text, take a life of their own, and now i wish jonah were real. SIGH. you have a gift, and you use it well. keep writing, and i will definitely keep reading. well done.