3/13/2009 c1 Tawny Owl
I liked the contrast between the bit with the poet at the beginning and the rest of the story. The first bit was very structured compared to the chaos of the run through the words.

On a personal opinion though, it seemed a bit incomplete at the end becasue we didn't return to the poet and the willow tree - Although the line you did finish on was a good one.

I did find it strange that a farm girl was wearing a silk dress, but you had some great images in here - like the elf king being visible in the wolf's eyes. I also really liked how you handled the dramatic climax at the end.

Was Christopher one of the Shadow Men, or was he someone else?

12/28/2008 c1 7I. Degolier
You have a really good story here. I like the rich descriptions and the way the language resembles that of medieval romances. It gives your story a sense of timelessness. My only suggestion would be to change some of the terms that are a bit too modern because they may pull your reader out of the fantasy. Since your story is written in the style of medieval Western European romances, stay with words that have Latin or Old English roots rather than Germanic or Scandinavian ones. I would suggest replacing "spooked" with "afeared of," "scoot" with "crept" or "glided," "twitch" with "shuddered," "treated" with "regarded," and "caught up with" with "enamored of," since all of these words have Latin or Old English roots predating 1200 A.D. This is a good story as is, though, so these are just minor suggestions if you're interested. :-)