for Unreal6/7/2010 c1 
8Subterfuge
Simple yet hauntingly real in moments of depression. It fits nicely under the angst of a person deprived of happiness in a turmoil of confusion. Like life has no more hope...
Understanding depression can be hard to some who have not yet experience the sheer depravity of it but you seem to have captured it in your poetry well
8SubterfugeSimple yet hauntingly real in moments of depression. It fits nicely under the angst of a person deprived of happiness in a turmoil of confusion. Like life has no more hope...
Understanding depression can be hard to some who have not yet experience the sheer depravity of it but you seem to have captured it in your poetry well
8/28/2009 c1 6Justlucy
Ugh, okay, I love it.
I love the rhthym and the use of words.
Spur of the moment poems are always best :)
6JustlucyUgh, okay, I love it.
I love the rhthym and the use of words.
Spur of the moment poems are always best :)
8/14/2009 c1 113403 Forbidden
Great writing! The way you wrote this, each line belongs right where it is and works well with the whole poem. You also expressed the feelings in here perfectly; I could tell exactly what the narrator was feeling and thing. Great job.
~403F
113403 ForbiddenGreat writing! The way you wrote this, each line belongs right where it is and works well with the whole poem. You also expressed the feelings in here perfectly; I could tell exactly what the narrator was feeling and thing. Great job.
~403F
8/4/2009 c1 fleur de l'est
A good compilation of surreal feelings, and nice rhyme scheme - it's almost like a clock ticking life away.
A good compilation of surreal feelings, and nice rhyme scheme - it's almost like a clock ticking life away.
6/16/2009 c1 121Wishdreamer89
That was...extraordinarily good. It felt surreal and real. Vivid. Natural. Unforced. Thoughtful. Dark and Twisting. I adored its quality..
121Wishdreamer89That was...extraordinarily good. It felt surreal and real. Vivid. Natural. Unforced. Thoughtful. Dark and Twisting. I adored its quality..
6/4/2009 c1 93NineteenxStars
wow... i feel a bit redundant about saying that but seriously that's all i can think of when i finish your poems. just, wow. you definitely have a gift.
93NineteenxStarswow... i feel a bit redundant about saying that but seriously that's all i can think of when i finish your poems. just, wow. you definitely have a gift.
5/4/2009 c1 The Sweet Angel of Darkness
This is really raw. The emotions are so intense, and I think it's amazing.
This is really raw. The emotions are so intense, and I think it's amazing.
4/29/2009 c1 22effervescent-sentiments
Wow, I want to know your secret when it comes to reviews. You are amazingly popular for a FP poet. :)
The last line stuck with me, but I didn't really care for the rest of the imagery - I know you say you don't listen to constructive criticism, but if you'd just twist the images, stand them on their heads, and make them original, I think you could really use this potential I see.
Keep writing. Keep improving.
Jules
22effervescent-sentimentsWow, I want to know your secret when it comes to reviews. You are amazingly popular for a FP poet. :)
The last line stuck with me, but I didn't really care for the rest of the imagery - I know you say you don't listen to constructive criticism, but if you'd just twist the images, stand them on their heads, and make them original, I think you could really use this potential I see.
Keep writing. Keep improving.
Jules