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4/4/2009 c1 15Nightingales
i love your peoms but if your writing from all honestly through your life, i hope you have better times ahead because this is soo amazing and so depressing and i would never wish this upon someone. but like i said, i love your peoms! keep writing!
4/4/2009 c1 28SpaceKid
I love the first line so much! But the image of the story this seems to be telling got to me straight away and that amazed me.

Well Done!
4/3/2009 c1 24I'm just a dreamer
THAT WAS SO COOL,I LOVE IT!

it reminded me of edward and bella a tiny bit

but i loved it it was so sweet good job

u should keep writing..

anyway it's so heart felt

well i think

keep writing plz!

britty :)
12/17/2008 c1 42Blinne Ainsley
Two problems I have:

Line 14: Passive constructions sound weird; perhaps you could change it to an active, "I still feel the devastation."

Line 15: "everyday" should be two words.

Otherwise, very emotional, and I'm sure almost any reader will connect to the premise.

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