for Inertia Falling12/22/2008 c1 
6Remember Me to Dawn
Wow! One of the best crafted poems I have seen here in sometime. I love how you vary line length and rhyme scheme to increase the emotional impact. And I love the half-thoughts left to fade (or be wondered about) by the ellipses. The only thing I'm not fond of is the random (?) letters in the thirteenth line. To mee they just seem sloppy. Best line- "For if life is one thing/It is omni-foul"
Truly memorable and impactful poem.
6Remember Me to DawnWow! One of the best crafted poems I have seen here in sometime. I love how you vary line length and rhyme scheme to increase the emotional impact. And I love the half-thoughts left to fade (or be wondered about) by the ellipses. The only thing I'm not fond of is the random (?) letters in the thirteenth line. To mee they just seem sloppy. Best line- "For if life is one thing/It is omni-foul"
Truly memorable and impactful poem.