for Respired Melody12/28/2008 c1 
31Cindy Moon
I liked the momentum this poem had, it reflects the musical quality of the metaphor. I'm definitely a fan of your work and am impressed with your rather reliable updates, unlike my own.
-Cindy Moon *)
31Cindy MoonI liked the momentum this poem had, it reflects the musical quality of the metaphor. I'm definitely a fan of your work and am impressed with your rather reliable updates, unlike my own.
-Cindy Moon *)
12/27/2008 c1 8LostInMe
I like the way you started with "inhale exhale inhale exhale" and then ended with it (I know, there's another line after it, but it's still towards the end). I also noticed your lack of commas, or any punctuation for that matter (except in one line). Both of these things really add to the effectiveness of the poem. Good work!
8LostInMeI like the way you started with "inhale exhale inhale exhale" and then ended with it (I know, there's another line after it, but it's still towards the end). I also noticed your lack of commas, or any punctuation for that matter (except in one line). Both of these things really add to the effectiveness of the poem. Good work!