for Mirrored Fate
12/31/2008 c1 115Remera
Hmm...interesting, but still needs to be fixed for spelling and grammar and word usage.
12/30/2008 c1 5quicktart
Well, this would've been a lot better, had you not misused your commas. I had a real hard time reading it because of that and the run-on sentences. Also, you're repeating yourself too often. But I can see that this story has great potential if worked on hard enough!