for Mirrored Fate12/31/2008 c1 
115Remera
Hmm...interesting, but still needs to be fixed for spelling and grammar and word usage.
115RemeraHmm...interesting, but still needs to be fixed for spelling and grammar and word usage.
12/30/2008 c1 5quicktart
Well, this would've been a lot better, had you not misused your commas. I had a real hard time reading it because of that and the run-on sentences. Also, you're repeating yourself too often. But I can see that this story has great potential if worked on hard enough!
~Rébecca
5quicktartWell, this would've been a lot better, had you not misused your commas. I had a real hard time reading it because of that and the run-on sentences. Also, you're repeating yourself too often. But I can see that this story has great potential if worked on hard enough!
~Rébecca