for Rough Petals5/20/2009 c2 
89Xara Nahara Campinelli
Ah! I found the answer to my question. Never mind! Really good story so far. Charlie reminds me a lot of Joss, except a little more tame. Great job so far.
89Xara Nahara CampinelliAh! I found the answer to my question. Never mind! Really good story so far. Charlie reminds me a lot of Joss, except a little more tame. Great job so far.
5/20/2009 c24 silverwater14
hey the story was awsome. i was woundering if you were going to do another like one of them with the kid or the brother's life or something cool like that i like the one with the with kid story but any way i really loved it.
hey the story was awsome. i was woundering if you were going to do another like one of them with the kid or the brother's life or something cool like that i like the one with the with kid story but any way i really loved it.
5/20/2009 c23 anonymous
well, you're done and all in all it was just okay. I know a lot of people like these kinds of stories, but I'm just not one of those people. I felt like you really didn't capture emotions through this story. It was almost like it was written numbly. This was really just a cliched story. There were some different characters and different circumstances with the same old stuff in it as in every story. I really never understand why these stories have so many reviews. Maybe becuase people just like bad literature. but anyway I thought it was written not poorly, but sadly uninteresting. Your technique of writing has been seen before. Speaking in general terms, most of the people who right these (cliched) types of stories have, the same writing style. It's very cut, plain, and dry. Please do not think of this as hate mail. this is just want I think and to bring realization to you. this just some constructive criticism.
-Anonymous
well, you're done and all in all it was just okay. I know a lot of people like these kinds of stories, but I'm just not one of those people. I felt like you really didn't capture emotions through this story. It was almost like it was written numbly. This was really just a cliched story. There were some different characters and different circumstances with the same old stuff in it as in every story. I really never understand why these stories have so many reviews. Maybe becuase people just like bad literature. but anyway I thought it was written not poorly, but sadly uninteresting. Your technique of writing has been seen before. Speaking in general terms, most of the people who right these (cliched) types of stories have, the same writing style. It's very cut, plain, and dry. Please do not think of this as hate mail. this is just want I think and to bring realization to you. this just some constructive criticism.
-Anonymous
5/20/2009 c1 Xara Nahara Campinelli
Awesome first chapter. I'm still trying to figure out who the woman is in this story: Could it be Melody, Joss, or some other chick that I don't know about? The suspense is KILLING me!
Awesome first chapter. I'm still trying to figure out who the woman is in this story: Could it be Melody, Joss, or some other chick that I don't know about? The suspense is KILLING me!
5/20/2009 c24 5sparkalie
its over? No it can't be!
I love it too much!
I'm so happy! I'm crying honest! YAY! Cole and Charlie are together again but that means the story's over and I don't have anything to cry over anymore...
:(
I hate it when a story ends like when I reach the past page of a book. It makes me sad yet happy.
I hate conflicting feelings. Your story made me feel them alot yet I love it, your story, you, the writer for writing it.
I hope that this isn't the last story you'll write about Cole and Charlie and everybody.
Write the Melody story and add a new character...or two...Cole and Charlie's kid and Noah and Addison's kid. Hehe.
Keep writing.
You are so awesome.
5sparkalieits over? No it can't be!
I love it too much!
I'm so happy! I'm crying honest! YAY! Cole and Charlie are together again but that means the story's over and I don't have anything to cry over anymore...
:(
I hate it when a story ends like when I reach the past page of a book. It makes me sad yet happy.
I hate conflicting feelings. Your story made me feel them alot yet I love it, your story, you, the writer for writing it.
I hope that this isn't the last story you'll write about Cole and Charlie and everybody.
Write the Melody story and add a new character...or two...Cole and Charlie's kid and Noah and Addison's kid. Hehe.
Keep writing.
You are so awesome.
5/20/2009 c24 marii
hullo! I just finished reading your story. I like it! Charlie is hilarious. You know now I have an inkling to procreate and name them Charlie... I hope it's a girl. At first I thought this was going to be about Charlie and Vince or whoever the guy who thought she was a prostitute. Ha! Somehow they just meet everywhere. A Romance/Comedy/Drama story begins. Actually that plot is not too bad! Anyways, I like where this one led... wonder if they are going to get married. Haha.. I have a crush on Noah. Thanks for the read.
hullo! I just finished reading your story. I like it! Charlie is hilarious. You know now I have an inkling to procreate and name them Charlie... I hope it's a girl. At first I thought this was going to be about Charlie and Vince or whoever the guy who thought she was a prostitute. Ha! Somehow they just meet everywhere. A Romance/Comedy/Drama story begins. Actually that plot is not too bad! Anyways, I like where this one led... wonder if they are going to get married. Haha.. I have a crush on Noah. Thanks for the read.
5/20/2009 c24 XxButterflyxAngelxBabygirl
fantastic ending! i loved it! i can't wait to check out your other stories!
fantastic ending! i loved it! i can't wait to check out your other stories!
5/20/2009 c24 Ranie
I really enjoyed your story! I don't often review alot, but I thought that this story definitely deserved a review. When I thought that Charlies really was going to refuse him, I started crying, because what man would climb the walls instead of climbing the stairs, when they just had surgery? And the blood all over, it must have been a scene. I really enjoyed the ending, and I felt like they didn't really need a marriage, because they knew that they loved each other, and there both weird anyways. lol!
I really enjoyed your story! I don't often review alot, but I thought that this story definitely deserved a review. When I thought that Charlies really was going to refuse him, I started crying, because what man would climb the walls instead of climbing the stairs, when they just had surgery? And the blood all over, it must have been a scene. I really enjoyed the ending, and I felt like they didn't really need a marriage, because they knew that they loved each other, and there both weird anyways. lol!
5/20/2009 c24 Jixnce
Oh my gawd its over :( That's sad.
But its really happy too! ^_^ They're going to have kids!
Oh my gawd its over :( That's sad.
But its really happy too! ^_^ They're going to have kids!
5/20/2009 c24 5forever.ephemeral
Though I'm sad it's over, I'm happy that this story ended that way. It's amazing how much they've both changed. I'm going to miss reading this.
For some strange reason, the summary for "The Rabbit Hole" reminded me of "Boston" by sweetart49. It's similar, that's all.
5forever.ephemeralThough I'm sad it's over, I'm happy that this story ended that way. It's amazing how much they've both changed. I'm going to miss reading this.
For some strange reason, the summary for "The Rabbit Hole" reminded me of "Boston" by sweetart49. It's similar, that's all.
5/20/2009 c22 forever.ephemeral
Four hours...? wow. Really cute make up scene, though the endurance game at the end is a little...frightening. haha
Four hours...? wow. Really cute make up scene, though the endurance game at the end is a little...frightening. haha
5/20/2009 c24 3Has A WaywithWords
Loved loved loved loved loved loved the story. I'm glad Charlie and Cole finally got their own happy endings. If you write a sequel, maybe write one about Addison and Noah, because we didn't really see much of Noah in the story and I want to get to know him better. Anyway, Loved it. Great work Penelope!
3Has A WaywithWordsLoved loved loved loved loved loved the story. I'm glad Charlie and Cole finally got their own happy endings. If you write a sequel, maybe write one about Addison and Noah, because we didn't really see much of Noah in the story and I want to get to know him better. Anyway, Loved it. Great work Penelope!
5/20/2009 c24 Mai-Lee T
Your story was amazing! I followed it from start to finish and I must say that I think you're an amazing writer, and I've never thought patience would pay off so much!
I think you should go with The Rabbit Hole, cuz it sounds more original and exciting than the other one. (There's enough cliche stories in the world, I think we can do without another one :P )
Anyways, good job and good luck with whatever you choose, I'll be reading c:
OH! and have you seen the movie Sleeping With The Enemy? I thought it might be like your story (and how amazing would that be?) but it turns out its a really freaky movie about a wife that gets beaten by her husband and runs away... only to be found again. Yeah. Kinda different. ;)
See ya!
Mai-lee
Your story was amazing! I followed it from start to finish and I must say that I think you're an amazing writer, and I've never thought patience would pay off so much!
I think you should go with The Rabbit Hole, cuz it sounds more original and exciting than the other one. (There's enough cliche stories in the world, I think we can do without another one :P )
Anyways, good job and good luck with whatever you choose, I'll be reading c:
OH! and have you seen the movie Sleeping With The Enemy? I thought it might be like your story (and how amazing would that be?) but it turns out its a really freaky movie about a wife that gets beaten by her husband and runs away... only to be found again. Yeah. Kinda different. ;)
See ya!
Mai-lee
5/20/2009 c24 16Aurora Dusk
That was amazing. =) The ending fit their characters perfectly! I definitely liked this story better than Sleeping With The Enemy...I can't wait to read more of your work! Both your new ideas look great, though The Rabbit Hole seems more enticing right now. =) The whole best friends/star crossed lovers thing hits too close to home. ^_~
16Aurora DuskThat was amazing. =) The ending fit their characters perfectly! I definitely liked this story better than Sleeping With The Enemy...I can't wait to read more of your work! Both your new ideas look great, though The Rabbit Hole seems more enticing right now. =) The whole best friends/star crossed lovers thing hits too close to home. ^_~
5/20/2009 c23 9JustYourAverageCrazyGirl
lol, loved it^^ i wanted to hear about their wedding though, lol! AH! its over . loved wen they threw the bed over to balceny(sp?) though! so sad...
9JustYourAverageCrazyGirllol, loved it^^ i wanted to hear about their wedding though, lol! AH! its over . loved wen they threw the bed over to balceny(sp?) though! so sad...