
1/6/2009 c1
10Soul Skater 79
AWESOME, i love how very little happens in the story yet I'm sucked in (Please review my story)

AWESOME, i love how very little happens in the story yet I'm sucked in (Please review my story)
1/2/2009 c1
28mikey magee
For the Review Two Forum
I love your opening line, it presents a nice idea and on top of that it forshadows the story, and showcases the character. Very nice work!
* "towers ans spires" "ans" should be "and"
This was a nice quick read, it read well and the pacing was nice and descriptive without going overboard!
Keep writing!

For the Review Two Forum
I love your opening line, it presents a nice idea and on top of that it forshadows the story, and showcases the character. Very nice work!
* "towers ans spires" "ans" should be "and"
This was a nice quick read, it read well and the pacing was nice and descriptive without going overboard!
Keep writing!