for Manhattan Love Story8/24/2001 c21 allegra
I always end up getting to the end of one of your chapters and sitting here forever thinking that anything i write in this box is going to come out idiotic in reference to the genius of your writing. (I'm sorry! I haven't reviewed in forever and I feel terribly guilty for it, I assure you) I guess authors prefer constructive comments but...I'm sorry, there's nothing i can say that isn't some form of praise about this novel or your writing. Honestly, I think it gets better with each chapter and I don't know what on earth I'm going to read when this ends. (Please please please say that isn't going to happen for a long time yet!) Anthony's parents tick me off pretty bad but...it's nothing compared to how I feel about this therapist! Arrgh, just like them to throw pills at the problem. I can't say enough about how you've progressed with this story. I was worried you'd bring Ben and Anthony together and then the storyline would become...almost predictable. Shame on me for doubting you skill. Every chapter only grabs the reader (or any smart reader that is) and drags them in deeper and onto this rollercoaster of emotion. I forget that this is fiction I'm *reading* and not reality I'm watching play out. I can just picture everything that happens in my mind so clearly as I'm reading it...its becoming hard to drag myself back into the real world where there are no devoted Bens or beautiful troubled Anthonys (at least not in my little corner of the world). I truly hope that someday you turn this into an actual published work. Maybe this is just wishful thinking or me being over-zealous but only an idiot would turn down publishing an author like you. Your writing is just stunning and I wait on baited breath for the next chapter.
I always end up getting to the end of one of your chapters and sitting here forever thinking that anything i write in this box is going to come out idiotic in reference to the genius of your writing. (I'm sorry! I haven't reviewed in forever and I feel terribly guilty for it, I assure you) I guess authors prefer constructive comments but...I'm sorry, there's nothing i can say that isn't some form of praise about this novel or your writing. Honestly, I think it gets better with each chapter and I don't know what on earth I'm going to read when this ends. (Please please please say that isn't going to happen for a long time yet!) Anthony's parents tick me off pretty bad but...it's nothing compared to how I feel about this therapist! Arrgh, just like them to throw pills at the problem. I can't say enough about how you've progressed with this story. I was worried you'd bring Ben and Anthony together and then the storyline would become...almost predictable. Shame on me for doubting you skill. Every chapter only grabs the reader (or any smart reader that is) and drags them in deeper and onto this rollercoaster of emotion. I forget that this is fiction I'm *reading* and not reality I'm watching play out. I can just picture everything that happens in my mind so clearly as I'm reading it...its becoming hard to drag myself back into the real world where there are no devoted Bens or beautiful troubled Anthonys (at least not in my little corner of the world). I truly hope that someday you turn this into an actual published work. Maybe this is just wishful thinking or me being over-zealous but only an idiot would turn down publishing an author like you. Your writing is just stunning and I wait on baited breath for the next chapter.
7/25/2001 c18 Vicci
Well I'm reviewing like I promised, but having problems signing in. I absolutely love this story. I'm so drawn in with all the characters, they're all so realistic and I really do feel for Ben and Anthony like they're real people. You are wonderfully talented as a writer and I wont be surprised if I ever find out that your getting published. Ta! ~vicci
Well I'm reviewing like I promised, but having problems signing in. I absolutely love this story. I'm so drawn in with all the characters, they're all so realistic and I really do feel for Ben and Anthony like they're real people. You are wonderfully talented as a writer and I wont be surprised if I ever find out that your getting published. Ta! ~vicci
7/25/2001 c18 No One
This is a very good chapter, but Ben is not that mushy as you said. *frown* It was just as I expected. After all, you can only act that way, when people don't tell you how they are and you really have to know. It happens to me all the time. I hope that the next chapter comes out soon. Keep writing adn I will keep on reading. Thank you for the oportunity of peace that your stories bring me everytime I read.
This is a very good chapter, but Ben is not that mushy as you said. *frown* It was just as I expected. After all, you can only act that way, when people don't tell you how they are and you really have to know. It happens to me all the time. I hope that the next chapter comes out soon. Keep writing adn I will keep on reading. Thank you for the oportunity of peace that your stories bring me everytime I read.
7/23/2001 c1 brandon formby
I LOVE BEN!...LOL
I LOVE BEN!...LOL
7/23/2001 c1 
10Ivvic
i';m coming back to finish this later, but i'm adding to favs now
i'll review proper when it's eniterly read, but so far so good. Ta!
10Ivvici';m coming back to finish this later, but i'm adding to favs now
i'll review proper when it's eniterly read, but so far so good. Ta!
7/20/2001 c18 1Setsunna
I love you, well your story anyhow! How come you write so well? It just isn't fair! Anyway I hope you can keep this up
1SetsunnaI love you, well your story anyhow! How come you write so well? It just isn't fair! Anyway I hope you can keep this up
7/19/2001 c18 2L.E. Lamkin
::blinks:: God, Sav, that was the most emotion-filled thing I've ever read. Anthony's troubled mind and his depression is palpable. The things he does and says, they fit perfectly, and give the entire book an entirely new feeling, giving the reader the feeling that we are slowly dropping lower and lower into the deep, dark recesses of the human mind. It's so...it's so dark and horrible. But there's always a light at the end of the darkest of tunnels, right? I sure hope so. Because Ben and Anthony make a perfect couple. They compliment each other in so many ways. Ben is acting just like anyone else would in their situation. It's all so chillingly realistic. And the last part, that was just gut-wrenching. I almost cried when Anthony started 'pleading' with God, sort of. It was...this chapter was very good, Sav. I am so proud of you, and all of the hard work you've put into this novel. I really am. You are an awesome writer, and anyone who doesn't appreciate this precious work of art just doesn't know what the hell they're talking about. Keep em comin, girl. :)
2L.E. Lamkin::blinks:: God, Sav, that was the most emotion-filled thing I've ever read. Anthony's troubled mind and his depression is palpable. The things he does and says, they fit perfectly, and give the entire book an entirely new feeling, giving the reader the feeling that we are slowly dropping lower and lower into the deep, dark recesses of the human mind. It's so...it's so dark and horrible. But there's always a light at the end of the darkest of tunnels, right? I sure hope so. Because Ben and Anthony make a perfect couple. They compliment each other in so many ways. Ben is acting just like anyone else would in their situation. It's all so chillingly realistic. And the last part, that was just gut-wrenching. I almost cried when Anthony started 'pleading' with God, sort of. It was...this chapter was very good, Sav. I am so proud of you, and all of the hard work you've put into this novel. I really am. You are an awesome writer, and anyone who doesn't appreciate this precious work of art just doesn't know what the hell they're talking about. Keep em comin, girl. :)
7/18/2001 c16 5GoldenEagle
**Spoilers(?)** this was put together really well. The emotion of death was captured well, how even some small acquantence can die and cause a different level of pain. I thought it was good. And the last paragraph showed how withdrawn Anthony has become in a very subtle way. good job!
5GoldenEagle**Spoilers(?)** this was put together really well. The emotion of death was captured well, how even some small acquantence can die and cause a different level of pain. I thought it was good. And the last paragraph showed how withdrawn Anthony has become in a very subtle way. good job!
7/18/2001 c15 GoldenEagle
Wow. i didn't think anyone'd die or anything. Very good element, though. On to the next chapter!
Wow. i didn't think anyone'd die or anything. Very good element, though. On to the next chapter!
7/14/2001 c17 3Nevyn
This chapter sure was finished quickly. You are a very good poam writter. Poor Anthony. He's so depressed. I think that someone aught to find his book, like his parents. That would add a new element to the story, don't you think? Very good. Keep the chapters coming please.
3NevynThis chapter sure was finished quickly. You are a very good poam writter. Poor Anthony. He's so depressed. I think that someone aught to find his book, like his parents. That would add a new element to the story, don't you think? Very good. Keep the chapters coming please.
7/13/2001 c17 10mediocrity
*Gatti emerges from the depths of the gaming world, PSX controller in hand* Rhap...so...dy... *blinks for the first time in 11 hours* And now for something completely different.
This was a really interesting Chapter, and don't think interesting means it was bad. I've never, ever seen something such as this...it's brilliant. Absoloutely brilliant. The poetry in itself is slightly too fractured to be truly considered poetry (ah, the joys of freeverse...), but then, that IS the point, ne? I like how it got less and less comprehensive near the end. Anthony seems to be going slightly mad. Mes wonders if it's because of Ben, or the dead bloke... It's always great to see someone snap. I wonder how you'll explain it in the next one...'Mata ne.
10mediocrity*Gatti emerges from the depths of the gaming world, PSX controller in hand* Rhap...so...dy... *blinks for the first time in 11 hours* And now for something completely different.
This was a really interesting Chapter, and don't think interesting means it was bad. I've never, ever seen something such as this...it's brilliant. Absoloutely brilliant. The poetry in itself is slightly too fractured to be truly considered poetry (ah, the joys of freeverse...), but then, that IS the point, ne? I like how it got less and less comprehensive near the end. Anthony seems to be going slightly mad. Mes wonders if it's because of Ben, or the dead bloke... It's always great to see someone snap. I wonder how you'll explain it in the next one...'Mata ne.
7/13/2001 c17 J. R. Earlbecke
O.o Um, he's going crazy. Now write the next chapter or I'll...I'll *whine* at you! -_^ (Kidding. ^^)
O.o Um, he's going crazy. Now write the next chapter or I'll...I'll *whine* at you! -_^ (Kidding. ^^)
7/13/2001 c16 J. R. Earlbecke
Heh, I have conversations like that with my parents sometimes. *rolls eyes*
Heh, I have conversations like that with my parents sometimes. *rolls eyes*
7/11/2001 c17 2L.E. Lamkin
Oh Lord. What is going to happen? I feel so horrible for Anthony. But he has so many reasons to be depressed. I hope you aren't setting down some foreshadowing for the future, Sav. I really don't. But those poems were very thought-provoking and an interesting and refreshing addition in your work that makes your book so much more original than any other. Great job.
2L.E. LamkinOh Lord. What is going to happen? I feel so horrible for Anthony. But he has so many reasons to be depressed. I hope you aren't setting down some foreshadowing for the future, Sav. I really don't. But those poems were very thought-provoking and an interesting and refreshing addition in your work that makes your book so much more original than any other. Great job.
7/11/2001 c8 No One
I thought that I'd review this chapter sience you changed it. I think that I liked the other verson better, although there are parts in here that you added that were good. Coupled with the parts that you took out of the first verson, I think that it may even get better, but that is up to you. I can email you and tell you more in detale of what I mean if you want. Just mail and tell me. Nice corrections mostly. Keep up your good work.
I thought that I'd review this chapter sience you changed it. I think that I liked the other verson better, although there are parts in here that you added that were good. Coupled with the parts that you took out of the first verson, I think that it may even get better, but that is up to you. I can email you and tell you more in detale of what I mean if you want. Just mail and tell me. Nice corrections mostly. Keep up your good work.