for Behind My Lips2/11/2009 c1 
173Little girl Big world
Saying goodbye is extremely hard especially to someone you love. I like the 3rd and 4th stanza they we're sweet. The ending was good but really sad.
173Little girl Big worldSaying goodbye is extremely hard especially to someone you love. I like the 3rd and 4th stanza they we're sweet. The ending was good but really sad.
1/12/2009 c1 painted eyes
This is a really beautiful, innocent poem, and I'm kinda surprised that its not got more reviews. I really liked some of the lines- well stanzas really- especially the last two. The rhyming flowed well and didnt seem forced, all in all, a really good job. Only one wee mistake that I noticed was on the 2nd stanza, thrid line "fine" I think is suppose to be "find"?
Anyway, keep up the good work
~painted
This is a really beautiful, innocent poem, and I'm kinda surprised that its not got more reviews. I really liked some of the lines- well stanzas really- especially the last two. The rhyming flowed well and didnt seem forced, all in all, a really good job. Only one wee mistake that I noticed was on the 2nd stanza, thrid line "fine" I think is suppose to be "find"?
Anyway, keep up the good work
~painted