
3/22/2009 c1
190Manifest-Destiny-x X
I loved the effect of all the rhetorical questions. It created a great atmosphere. I also liked the element of self-doubt that was portrayed.

I loved the effect of all the rhetorical questions. It created a great atmosphere. I also liked the element of self-doubt that was portrayed.
1/2/2009 c1
9Mayo on toast
You give it no credit in your summary; it's good, don't tell the public otherwise.
Love the imagery here, and I think that you expressed what you were trying to perfectly.
The only mistake was a forgotten can, or maybe a did, or something similar here:
"How _ this happen?" Other than that, seamless. Kudos to you.

You give it no credit in your summary; it's good, don't tell the public otherwise.
Love the imagery here, and I think that you expressed what you were trying to perfectly.
The only mistake was a forgotten can, or maybe a did, or something similar here:
"How _ this happen?" Other than that, seamless. Kudos to you.