for The Turtle and the Tortoise1/5/2009 c2 D.A.K
Again, nothing major. You mispelled 'very' as 'vary'. 'Too' should be 'two'. c: and 'owe' should be 'oh' as in 'oh no!'. Too bad that they forgot their moves, since they practiced so long. :c Still cute~ teamwork is always sweet.
Again, nothing major. You mispelled 'very' as 'vary'. 'Too' should be 'two'. c: and 'owe' should be 'oh' as in 'oh no!'. Too bad that they forgot their moves, since they practiced so long. :c Still cute~ teamwork is always sweet.
1/5/2009 c1 D.A.K. Your sister's beta
Hey there. Cute story. Except for a few moments where you misuse punctuation (for example '?' and '.' might be missing or in the wrong place) it's not bad. :)
Hey there. Cute story. Except for a few moments where you misuse punctuation (for example '?' and '.' might be missing or in the wrong place) it's not bad. :)
31/4/2009 c1 Fallen Star Angel
Interesting story... It is a good job for her age though. Congrats!
SMiling Star Angel
Interesting story... It is a good job for her age though. Congrats!
SMiling Star Angel