for Shards for Death3/12/2013 c1 Soggypotatoes
...this is wonderful... I can't even form words, I... Oh my god
...this is wonderful... I can't even form words, I... Oh my god
6/7/2010 c1 
8Subterfuge
This poetry is mysterious in terms of how one can interpret it, but as should poetry expresses itself, through meanings interpreted by one's own.
To me this poetry resembles a symbolically evil clutch of a dank and depressed image, probably a guilt, or a depressive thought culminating to further demoralize the poet. These images, thoughts and voices grow louder and with each passing time it gets worse... depressively anti-climatic as this poem should be. Very deathly indeed
8SubterfugeThis poetry is mysterious in terms of how one can interpret it, but as should poetry expresses itself, through meanings interpreted by one's own.
To me this poetry resembles a symbolically evil clutch of a dank and depressed image, probably a guilt, or a depressive thought culminating to further demoralize the poet. These images, thoughts and voices grow louder and with each passing time it gets worse... depressively anti-climatic as this poem should be. Very deathly indeed
11/5/2009 c1 162setne
As another reviewer pointed out, the metre and the rhythm here are well-crafted, thought out. Though quite a dark piece, it is a dark beauty nonetheless. I enjoyed reading this, well done.
Many thanks for the reviews.
162setneAs another reviewer pointed out, the metre and the rhythm here are well-crafted, thought out. Though quite a dark piece, it is a dark beauty nonetheless. I enjoyed reading this, well done.
Many thanks for the reviews.
9/24/2009 c1 4wildtigers
your words are pure beauty and i could only wish of your talent.
this poem is simply amazing.
4wildtigersyour words are pure beauty and i could only wish of your talent.
this poem is simply amazing.
9/10/2009 c1 62WordSpeak
This is one of the most beautiful poems I ever read on this site. Great images, sounds, and diction! I'm favoriting this
62WordSpeakThis is one of the most beautiful poems I ever read on this site. Great images, sounds, and diction! I'm favoriting this
9/4/2009 c1 gold against the soul
Like me, you enjoy the technical side of things - a steady metre and the occasional rhyme. That is lovely to see, when so much today is written in free verse, often out of lethargy rather than preference (admittedly, I too am guilty of that). This is an accomplished little piece with some atmospheric imagery. I especially like the first two lines - simple but all the more chilling for their nakedness.
- Gatsby
Like me, you enjoy the technical side of things - a steady metre and the occasional rhyme. That is lovely to see, when so much today is written in free verse, often out of lethargy rather than preference (admittedly, I too am guilty of that). This is an accomplished little piece with some atmospheric imagery. I especially like the first two lines - simple but all the more chilling for their nakedness.
- Gatsby
8/23/2009 c1 CandleQueen
"But the soul is close to death."
I liked the irony in that sentence-how you painted the soul as being mortal.
I love all the tactile imagery you used in this piece. Well done. :D
-Ramen
"But the soul is close to death."
I liked the irony in that sentence-how you painted the soul as being mortal.
I love all the tactile imagery you used in this piece. Well done. :D
-Ramen
7/24/2009 c1 26Mirabella
Lovely poem, the first line really gets me into it.
But i thought perhaps that maybe the 4th and 8thlin needed another syllable? Dont mind me, i probably read it wrong! :)
I really like the imagery in this, and the name of the poem. :) Lovely.
26MirabellaLovely poem, the first line really gets me into it.
But i thought perhaps that maybe the 4th and 8thlin needed another syllable? Dont mind me, i probably read it wrong! :)
I really like the imagery in this, and the name of the poem. :) Lovely.
7/11/2009 c1 113403 Forbidden
I like this, the imagery is quite vivid and intense. This seems short yet very substantial to me, for some reason. I love the, "Seconds now are useless," because you phrased it with an uncommon sentence structure, which seems to separate it from normal speech in a way. Nice job.
~403F
113403 ForbiddenI like this, the imagery is quite vivid and intense. This seems short yet very substantial to me, for some reason. I love the, "Seconds now are useless," because you phrased it with an uncommon sentence structure, which seems to separate it from normal speech in a way. Nice job.
~403F
5/25/2009 c1 The Citizen Shine
Hm . . . very good imagry. It almost makes me feel cold . . . . great work, keep it up!
Hm . . . very good imagry. It almost makes me feel cold . . . . great work, keep it up!