for In Your Eyes1/18/2009 c1 tangerine dreamer
i feel the resentment in your words. they're simple and the rhyming is great, but the words are so powerful especially in the last stanza. great job!
i feel the resentment in your words. they're simple and the rhyming is great, but the words are so powerful especially in the last stanza. great job!
1/18/2009 c1 
121doctor's diagnosis
I've been having a lot of trouble reviewing today. I press go automatically thinking thats what you still have to do to submit a review. Jeez. Anyway.
This is sad, but honest, which takes it from like, a self-depreciating whine fest to something more mature and really, poetic. This rhyme is fabulous, not forced at all. There are a few typos though, just a quick run through with spell check should fix most of those. (but trust me, your not alone with that. i prefer to write my poetry in notepad, where there's no spell check built in, but then my browser does have it, wow this is a long little side note...) :)
121doctor's diagnosisI've been having a lot of trouble reviewing today. I press go automatically thinking thats what you still have to do to submit a review. Jeez. Anyway.
This is sad, but honest, which takes it from like, a self-depreciating whine fest to something more mature and really, poetic. This rhyme is fabulous, not forced at all. There are a few typos though, just a quick run through with spell check should fix most of those. (but trust me, your not alone with that. i prefer to write my poetry in notepad, where there's no spell check built in, but then my browser does have it, wow this is a long little side note...) :)