2/8/2009 c1 612simpleplan13
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I really like the third line. That was a really great similie. I didn't really like the desert similie though. I mean I liked the idea of comparing it to a desert, but the after a minute or two doesn't really make sense. Deserts are dry all the time. I did like the ending though, a nice transition back into the beginning almost.
Review Marathon this weekend (link in my profile)!
I really like the third line. That was a really great similie. I didn't really like the desert similie though. I mean I liked the idea of comparing it to a desert, but the after a minute or two doesn't really make sense. Deserts are dry all the time. I did like the ending though, a nice transition back into the beginning almost.
1/22/2009 c1 3The True Dreamer
I really like this peom also. It actually reminds me of one of my friends who lives like this continually...I just pray that soon my friend woun't have to deal with such a life. But anyway, great job!
I really like this peom also. It actually reminds me of one of my friends who lives like this continually...I just pray that soon my friend woun't have to deal with such a life. But anyway, great job!