for Somethings you just can't avoid2/8/2009 c1 
612simpleplan13
Review Marathon this weekend (link in my profile)!
You switch tenses in this piece. I might reread it and try to fix that.
"As the words we speak was only one syllable and nothing more."...were
I like the part about the vibes floating around. That was a really nice description. I also like your simile about the dog, that was a good description as well. The last line confused me though. Shutting down your time. Maybe I'm just missing something...
612simpleplan13Review Marathon this weekend (link in my profile)!
You switch tenses in this piece. I might reread it and try to fix that.
"As the words we speak was only one syllable and nothing more."...were
I like the part about the vibes floating around. That was a really nice description. I also like your simile about the dog, that was a good description as well. The last line confused me though. Shutting down your time. Maybe I'm just missing something...
1/26/2009 c1 3The True Dreamer
I'm sure everyone with a job can relate to this poem...I sure can! Nice work!
3The True DreamerI'm sure everyone with a job can relate to this poem...I sure can! Nice work!