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3/30/2018 c50 5marzmez
This was a fun story to read. The only real complaint I have is Formatting! It drove me nuts trying to figure out who was speaking when the whole conversation was in one paragraph. Every once in a while there would be a wrong word. For example, once you had the word "conceded" when I'm pretty sure you meant "conceited". Other than that, fun read!
3/20/2012 c38 3Luna Mari
Just emailed you the revisions... I love this chapter. Mostly Fallon's sarcasm, and especially Chris's coming back :). It's interesting that William took care of Fallon when he saw she was sick. He really is starting to seem like such a nice guy :)
2/28/2012 c37 Luna Mari
Just sent the revisions for this chapter. Quite surprised that William reached out to Fallon... wondering about Christopher though. And with William, I'm hoping he's truly sincere and not just playing games with Fallon. It's the last thing she needs, but that's the type of thing that would happen in real life.
6/20/2011 c36 Luna Mari
Just sent the revisions... Aw... :( I feel so sad for Fallon. I hope everything gets better. You're really good at getting across how she was feeling... Almost made me cry :(
6/20/2011 c35 Luna Mari
Just sen the revisions... Absolutely loved this chapter... So glad that Chris and Fallon could finally talk a bit, but Chris had some nerve trying to kiss her... Can't wait to read the next chapter :)
3/8/2011 c34 Luna Mari
Just sent the revisions... this chapter makes me feel so sad... :( I hope everything will be okay
3/8/2011 c33 Luna Mari
Just sent the revision... I loved this chapter. It was so exciting! And I sense something between Christopher and Fallon... at least from Christopher, anyway... :)
1/20/2011 c32 Luna Mari
Just sent the revisions. What an exciting chapter! :D I'm so happy that Fallon and Chris made it to the next round... I wonder if they'll race against each other... Either in the second round OR the final... :D
1/20/2011 c31 Luna Mari
Just sent the revisions. What an interesting performance from Fallon... I wonder what Daniel's look meant... and what/who exactly was Chris referring to... Can't wait to find out what happens at the charity race. :)
1/20/2011 c30 Luna Mari
Just sent the revisions. I hope Fallon finds a healthier way to cope with all the emotions she's dealing with. But at least this sudden creativity of hers is coming out of it. And I wonder how the charity race is going to go... It sounds so exciting. I promise to get another one or two chapters at the least out to you today.
1/11/2011 c29 Luna Mari
The ending of this chapter was so sweet... I can't believe that Phil gave Fallon and Christopher the racetrack... I'm happy of their idea to use it for a charity race :)
1/11/2011 c28 Luna Mari
What a dreadfully sad chapter... :( I wonder how they'll all deal with the loss of Phill as time goes on...
12/9/2010 c27 Luna Mari
Just sent the revisions for this chapter. I really hope that Phil gets better. :(
12/9/2010 c26 Luna Mari
Just sent the revisions for this chapter... Wow, what a cliff-hanger... I'm glad Fallon had fun with her family... well, with the exception of the Daniel/William/tabloid thing... And to come back to this? I hope Phil's okay. :(
12/8/2010 c25 Luna Mari
Just sent the revision for this chapter. So far, I really like Fallon's family and especially cousin Maria. I love the new POV that she gave Fallon. Can't wait to read more :)
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