for Jealousy Monster2/18/2011 c1 
612simpleplan13
I forgot to mention in my last review, thanks for your reviews!
I like this piece. I think jealousy as a monster has been done a lot but your descriptions were still interesting and not cliched. Well done.
612simpleplan13I forgot to mention in my last review, thanks for your reviews!
I like this piece. I think jealousy as a monster has been done a lot but your descriptions were still interesting and not cliched. Well done.
10/26/2010 c1 287Archia
When you read this the rhyming is there, but when you look through it, it's not obvious to find. At least to me it's not. I like that in a poem, it really helps the rhythm. I really liked the message behind this and you described jealousy really well. Well done.
287ArchiaWhen you read this the rhyming is there, but when you look through it, it's not obvious to find. At least to me it's not. I like that in a poem, it really helps the rhythm. I really liked the message behind this and you described jealousy really well. Well done.
9/20/2009 c1 4Keree
That poem was so good it landed in my favorites list. It means something to me, which count the blessings, lots of things don't.
-EverythingHasAnotherSide
4KereeThat poem was so good it landed in my favorites list. It means something to me, which count the blessings, lots of things don't.
-EverythingHasAnotherSide
7/12/2009 c1 Hitomi Itsanaki
Yes it is. I have been jealous before not even know it. Everyone noticed before me. I love the word choice of words. XD
Yes it is. I have been jealous before not even know it. Everyone noticed before me. I love the word choice of words. XD
5/28/2009 c1 Ribbon on the Rose
That's really good! and definitely the truth. jealousy is one of many monsters of the world
That's really good! and definitely the truth. jealousy is one of many monsters of the world
2/2/2009 c1 7Savella
Wow, there's stories comin' out the wazoo!
Anyway, I like this one a lot better than the rollercoaster one! The only thing I would recommend is to combine the last three lines, somehow. Not that it really needs it, but that would make the second stating of the metaphor less abrupt. Maybe something like: "Jealousy is a monster/One that can't be stopped." It doesn't matter to me if you change it or not, because I still love it, either way!
7SavellaWow, there's stories comin' out the wazoo!
Anyway, I like this one a lot better than the rollercoaster one! The only thing I would recommend is to combine the last three lines, somehow. Not that it really needs it, but that would make the second stating of the metaphor less abrupt. Maybe something like: "Jealousy is a monster/One that can't be stopped." It doesn't matter to me if you change it or not, because I still love it, either way!