
12/9/2011 c1
3AJS
I read this story from Kindle and wanted to review here since my reviewing style is a bit different from what people normally read on those book sites, especially since it'll probably contain a lot of spoilers.
Okay I think the writing in this story was OKAY. It definitely improved as the story went on but definitely in the beginning it seemed like you had a hard time getting a solid hold on Bailey's personality. Everything came out really short, abrupt, and too concise and rudimentary. Things weren't described enough, primarily summarized, and just told like a story rather than actually playing it all out for us.
I also didn't really see the chemistry between Bailey and Collin. Sure I wanted them to end up together but to me they didn't really fit that well. There was nothing about the pair that really screamed at me that they should be together. Was definitely not convinced about them in the way I was about Lucas and Irelyn.
Also I feel like the whole Tori thing wasn't explained enough. If nothing was going on between them, what right did Tori have to ask about why Bailey was over? Why did LUCAS think Collin liked Tori? Wouldn't he have known best? Also why did Collin ask not to tell Tori after he and Bailey first slept together? Collin's attraction as definitely not apparent, at least not in the beginning. I felt like this may have stemmed from a lack of character development.
I also felt like Bailey's fights with Veronica were pretty petty and sounded like something out of high school. Sure, nasty words were exchanged, but they just seemed a bit immature for their ages.
The last third of the story though definitely was a lot better than the first two. I did enjoy the story, and I did like seeing Bailey and Collin end up together. I'm not sure I liked how things turned out with Morgan, especially since the three of them used to be so close. Collin and Bailey are cute though. Best of luck on your writing endeavors. I already purchased one of your other stories to read.
- Alyssa

I read this story from Kindle and wanted to review here since my reviewing style is a bit different from what people normally read on those book sites, especially since it'll probably contain a lot of spoilers.
Okay I think the writing in this story was OKAY. It definitely improved as the story went on but definitely in the beginning it seemed like you had a hard time getting a solid hold on Bailey's personality. Everything came out really short, abrupt, and too concise and rudimentary. Things weren't described enough, primarily summarized, and just told like a story rather than actually playing it all out for us.
I also didn't really see the chemistry between Bailey and Collin. Sure I wanted them to end up together but to me they didn't really fit that well. There was nothing about the pair that really screamed at me that they should be together. Was definitely not convinced about them in the way I was about Lucas and Irelyn.
Also I feel like the whole Tori thing wasn't explained enough. If nothing was going on between them, what right did Tori have to ask about why Bailey was over? Why did LUCAS think Collin liked Tori? Wouldn't he have known best? Also why did Collin ask not to tell Tori after he and Bailey first slept together? Collin's attraction as definitely not apparent, at least not in the beginning. I felt like this may have stemmed from a lack of character development.
I also felt like Bailey's fights with Veronica were pretty petty and sounded like something out of high school. Sure, nasty words were exchanged, but they just seemed a bit immature for their ages.
The last third of the story though definitely was a lot better than the first two. I did enjoy the story, and I did like seeing Bailey and Collin end up together. I'm not sure I liked how things turned out with Morgan, especially since the three of them used to be so close. Collin and Bailey are cute though. Best of luck on your writing endeavors. I already purchased one of your other stories to read.
- Alyssa
2/14/2010 c21
3RayaSlayer
WOOHOO! I'm so glad that Bailey got her happily ever after. It killed me to see everyone miss understanding her. Sure, some things she didn't do exactly right, but nobody's perfect.
Hehe...Colin and Bailey are so adorable together. :)
Thank you for another wonderful story. I'm not sure if you have already written it or not but it would be interesting to see a story about Morgan as well :)
I'm off to go check to see if you have. Thank you so much again :):)

WOOHOO! I'm so glad that Bailey got her happily ever after. It killed me to see everyone miss understanding her. Sure, some things she didn't do exactly right, but nobody's perfect.
Hehe...Colin and Bailey are so adorable together. :)
Thank you for another wonderful story. I'm not sure if you have already written it or not but it would be interesting to see a story about Morgan as well :)
I'm off to go check to see if you have. Thank you so much again :):)
1/22/2010 c21 sazanka
Hi! I loved the prequel so much that I read this story next and finished it all in one sitting! haahahha.
It was good.. really good. I enjoyed it heaps!
I admit that most of my predictions as I was reading this story, were right. (Such as Morgan actually in love with Spencer, not Collin. And how Tori had some past with Owen). But I still love this story and didn't find it cliche at all.
Oh, one interesting prediction I made was that Irelyn would be in the grand plan to get Morgan to realise who Owen really was.. since I always thought Owen really lusted over Irelyn and not Bailey. But this is Bailey's story huh?
Anyway, well done!
Hi! I loved the prequel so much that I read this story next and finished it all in one sitting! haahahha.
It was good.. really good. I enjoyed it heaps!
I admit that most of my predictions as I was reading this story, were right. (Such as Morgan actually in love with Spencer, not Collin. And how Tori had some past with Owen). But I still love this story and didn't find it cliche at all.
Oh, one interesting prediction I made was that Irelyn would be in the grand plan to get Morgan to realise who Owen really was.. since I always thought Owen really lusted over Irelyn and not Bailey. But this is Bailey's story huh?
Anyway, well done!
10/28/2009 c21
1Jinxed Rogue
And we've reached the end! It's good that you're showing Morgan progressively working to get back into the group, and that it's not an instant fix. A happy ending with room for growth. Good work.

And we've reached the end! It's good that you're showing Morgan progressively working to get back into the group, and that it's not an instant fix. A happy ending with room for growth. Good work.
10/28/2009 c12 Jinxed Rogue
I had a feeling Collin wasn't the one. Morgan is getting on my nerves though. Too wishy-washy.
I had a feeling Collin wasn't the one. Morgan is getting on my nerves though. Too wishy-washy.
10/28/2009 c11 Jinxed Rogue
I'm sorry you lost your original chapters!
Anyway, I don't think Morgan has any right to be *that* upset, and for Irelyn to take her side when Bailey supported her being with Lucas is ridiculous.
I feel bad for Spencer though because Collin is his cousin and he was with Bailey.
I'm sorry you lost your original chapters!
Anyway, I don't think Morgan has any right to be *that* upset, and for Irelyn to take her side when Bailey supported her being with Lucas is ridiculous.
I feel bad for Spencer though because Collin is his cousin and he was with Bailey.
10/28/2009 c10 Jinxed Rogue
Irelyn just won hypocritical b^t@h of the year on FP for saying that to Bailey.
Irelyn just won hypocritical b^t@h of the year on FP for saying that to Bailey.
10/28/2009 c9 Jinxed Rogue
I know it's supposed to be a romance story, and we know the girl gets her guy. But your style leaves me wanting more and not caring how it ends, and just enjoy the read.
I know it's supposed to be a romance story, and we know the girl gets her guy. But your style leaves me wanting more and not caring how it ends, and just enjoy the read.
10/28/2009 c6 Jinxed Rogue
I read the ATWR, and I didn't really see much of Bailey so I wasn't sure how I felt about her. I'm on Chapter 6 and I like her a lot more than Irelyn (who, to be brutally honest, was a bit bland and felt like a lot of other characters I've read before). I'm enjoying Bailey more and more with each chapter because she has more of an edge to her.
I read the ATWR, and I didn't really see much of Bailey so I wasn't sure how I felt about her. I'm on Chapter 6 and I like her a lot more than Irelyn (who, to be brutally honest, was a bit bland and felt like a lot of other characters I've read before). I'm enjoying Bailey more and more with each chapter because she has more of an edge to her.
10/28/2009 c5 Jinxed Rogue
I just wanted to say thanks for writing a story where the girl is not a doormat and is control of her bed partners.
I just wanted to say thanks for writing a story where the girl is not a doormat and is control of her bed partners.
10/6/2009 c21 MarieChristine87
I think my favorite thing about this series is that the girls don't all each end up with a member of the band. If you fleshed out the two stories more they'd definitely be publishable romance novels (not just novellas) =)
Also, I looked the pictures of your characters and they are almost exactly how I imagined them. You really did a great job in giving your readers people to know.
I think my favorite thing about this series is that the girls don't all each end up with a member of the band. If you fleshed out the two stories more they'd definitely be publishable romance novels (not just novellas) =)
Also, I looked the pictures of your characters and they are almost exactly how I imagined them. You really did a great job in giving your readers people to know.
9/13/2009 c21 RedMae
I really love this story, i think this series is my favourite of all the ones you have done.
Xxo
I really love this story, i think this series is my favourite of all the ones you have done.
Xxo
9/4/2009 c21 flowingypsy
I really enjoyed All The Wrong Reasons and I truly enjoy this one, your stories are incredible and unique- keep up the outstanding work.
I really enjoyed All The Wrong Reasons and I truly enjoy this one, your stories are incredible and unique- keep up the outstanding work.
9/1/2009 c21 CharlotteBradhadair
i really liked it! but i prefered the first one though and i really hated Morgan in this story. i dont really like the last chapter either, it was alright but i think it could have benn better
chharlotte
i really liked it! but i prefered the first one though and i really hated Morgan in this story. i dont really like the last chapter either, it was alright but i think it could have benn better
chharlotte