for The Rose of Love7/6/2009 c1 
17Unique1952
I love the imagery in this piece. You're very talented with expression through words, nice work.
17Unique1952I love the imagery in this piece. You're very talented with expression through words, nice work.
3/2/2009 c1 612simpleplan13
"And every time, I bid you adieu/My sacred ritual that I perform"... this sounded awkward. I feel like the word that shouldn't be there.
Your punctuation is a bit all over. I would either use it uniformly, grammatically or not at all.
When I read the title, I didn't think I would like the piece. It seemed very cliched. However, when I read it I liked it a lot. The rhyming works well and the tone of the language with words like whilst was great. Your rose imagery was unique and incorporating the seasons was a nice touch.
612simpleplan13"And every time, I bid you adieu/My sacred ritual that I perform"... this sounded awkward. I feel like the word that shouldn't be there.
Your punctuation is a bit all over. I would either use it uniformly, grammatically or not at all.
When I read the title, I didn't think I would like the piece. It seemed very cliched. However, when I read it I liked it a lot. The rhyming works well and the tone of the language with words like whilst was great. Your rose imagery was unique and incorporating the seasons was a nice touch.