for The Magic in the Blood9/8/2012 c16 Guest
Umm this is the exact same
Umm this is the exact same
2/14/2012 c5 sw33tdaisie
ummm...is damien supposed to be kale? it sounds like him but the name is changed...
ummm...is damien supposed to be kale? it sounds like him but the name is changed...
6/15/2011 c30 The Imagination Addict
This has been a very interesting story. If you don’t mind my asking, how old are you?
Anyway, the point of the review is to feedback so…
You have a few grammatical errors, especially punctuation, nothing too difficult to edit.
The characters are endearing. Character development is limited, but I can’t offer much help in this department cos I suck at it.
Plot is good. I think the action scenes are pretty good too.
All in all, quite a nice read. I like the introduction of werewolves. (But then I just love wolves, heh.)
This has been a very interesting story. If you don’t mind my asking, how old are you?
Anyway, the point of the review is to feedback so…
You have a few grammatical errors, especially punctuation, nothing too difficult to edit.
The characters are endearing. Character development is limited, but I can’t offer much help in this department cos I suck at it.
Plot is good. I think the action scenes are pretty good too.
All in all, quite a nice read. I like the introduction of werewolves. (But then I just love wolves, heh.)
6/11/2011 c12 PandorasTwin
Hey, I only read up to this chapter. The idea behind your story seems good and you have interesting characters, but you really need to work on sentence order and word choices. You use incorrect homophones in quite a few places, and your sentences would read better if switched around in various instances. Especially your prologue.
Hey, I only read up to this chapter. The idea behind your story seems good and you have interesting characters, but you really need to work on sentence order and word choices. You use incorrect homophones in quite a few places, and your sentences would read better if switched around in various instances. Especially your prologue.
3/23/2011 c19 Sonyashinto
This story is interesting and im looking forward to reading more. Please update soon.
P.S. i was confused with a earlier chapter. It was when Dimitri came in and helped out and when he got back to the car Althea was there waiting for him, then started making out. so what I'm trying to get to here is Dimitri, Kale, or is this some part of a twisted plot?
Update soon.
Ja-Ne =^_^=
This story is interesting and im looking forward to reading more. Please update soon.
P.S. i was confused with a earlier chapter. It was when Dimitri came in and helped out and when he got back to the car Althea was there waiting for him, then started making out. so what I'm trying to get to here is Dimitri, Kale, or is this some part of a twisted plot?
Update soon.
Ja-Ne =^_^=
3/14/2011 c17 
16ValerieYoung
omg! u shud totally publish! i love da story so far! but will u still b publishing on here?
16ValerieYoungomg! u shud totally publish! i love da story so far! but will u still b publishing on here?
9/4/2010 c16 Da-zGreen
Oh, I really want to know who she is going to choose. Do update as soon as possible.
Oh, I really want to know who she is going to choose. Do update as soon as possible.
9/4/2010 c14 Da-zGreen
OMG! Artemis likes her. But I kind guess it was expected. You know, I think twins always goes for the same thing. lol. On to the next!
OMG! Artemis likes her. But I kind guess it was expected. You know, I think twins always goes for the same thing. lol. On to the next!
9/3/2010 c13 Da-zGreen
I feel so bad for Phoenix. Every time they do something like that, they are always interrupted. lol. Thanks for the update, you don't know how long I have been waiting for this story to continue. I'll be back later to read the others. Now, I have to and do my homework lol. Thanks again.
I feel so bad for Phoenix. Every time they do something like that, they are always interrupted. lol. Thanks for the update, you don't know how long I have been waiting for this story to continue. I'll be back later to read the others. Now, I have to and do my homework lol. Thanks again.
9/2/2010 c12 blackrule
One big dump! I have been waiting ages for an update! I can't wait to read what happens next!
One big dump! I have been waiting ages for an update! I can't wait to read what happens next!
9/2/2010 c12 XoLilSquirtoX
hey you!
i was rereading the whole story, and i still really like all of it, and i cant rereview chapters that ive already read. haha i tried... and failed. XD
but if u put up one chapter a month it will keep people waiting for the next chapter :]
cheers :]
S.
hey you!
i was rereading the whole story, and i still really like all of it, and i cant rereview chapters that ive already read. haha i tried... and failed. XD
but if u put up one chapter a month it will keep people waiting for the next chapter :]
cheers :]
S.