for I Hate It How I Love You Still4/21/2009 c1 
5mixdown13
i like the way you used of the rhetorical question in this poem, showing how she questioning herself. Rhythmically, most of the time it flows very well and i enjoyed reading this. Good job.
5mixdown13i like the way you used of the rhetorical question in this poem, showing how she questioning herself. Rhythmically, most of the time it flows very well and i enjoyed reading this. Good job.
4/20/2009 c1 1Harlee Rae
Wow... You know exactly how I feel...haha Why are the people we fall in love with always assholes?
1Harlee RaeWow... You know exactly how I feel...haha Why are the people we fall in love with always assholes?
4/18/2009 c1 5Tempura Maki
my, my, the perils of destructive love... I find this sad cause I'm not the type to hurt myself for love. But I only say that now... This piece is great! (and scary for me..)
5Tempura Makimy, my, the perils of destructive love... I find this sad cause I'm not the type to hurt myself for love. But I only say that now... This piece is great! (and scary for me..)
4/16/2009 c1 55Angela Nichole
wow... this poem brings back memories! I know all too well what it feels like to be put through that.
How wonderful writing helps! It's what has been helping me for the past 4 years!
Keep writing! :)
55Angela Nicholewow... this poem brings back memories! I know all too well what it feels like to be put through that.
How wonderful writing helps! It's what has been helping me for the past 4 years!
Keep writing! :)
4/14/2009 c1 36xxNightenGalexx
I can relate to this story, You expressed your emotions beautifully. It gets an 11 out of 10.
36xxNightenGalexxI can relate to this story, You expressed your emotions beautifully. It gets an 11 out of 10.
4/13/2009 c1 Bobby-Revan
I really appreciate this poem because it gives me hope that the person I crushed will still love me when we are able to get together again. Your poetry is wonderful, keep posting more!
-Bobby
I really appreciate this poem because it gives me hope that the person I crushed will still love me when we are able to get together again. Your poetry is wonderful, keep posting more!
-Bobby
4/13/2009 c1 senseofhumor81
Haha! Does every girl go through this after a break up. It's like you keep asking yourself over and over again 'What did I do wrong?' or 'Was I enough for him/her?' Then you realized that you did nothing wrong and no matter what...you still love this person anyway. Crazy lol!
I love this poem and I am gonna make this my favorite. I can totally relate to this.
Haha! Does every girl go through this after a break up. It's like you keep asking yourself over and over again 'What did I do wrong?' or 'Was I enough for him/her?' Then you realized that you did nothing wrong and no matter what...you still love this person anyway. Crazy lol!
I love this poem and I am gonna make this my favorite. I can totally relate to this.
3/29/2009 c1 5shanicole
wow. i'm impressed. i know there's so many people out there who can relate to this poem. actually, at first i was thinking (like the review previous to mine) that this was going to end up being very cliche. but then you go an create these lines like "And I still wait for you" and "And I fear I will always love you" which made me really love your poem. brilliant work.
5shanicolewow. i'm impressed. i know there's so many people out there who can relate to this poem. actually, at first i was thinking (like the review previous to mine) that this was going to end up being very cliche. but then you go an create these lines like "And I still wait for you" and "And I fear I will always love you" which made me really love your poem. brilliant work.
3/29/2009 c1 2Unknown Error 4.0
I think this poem is good. Actually, both of your poems are good. I like the formatting, it really goes easy on these poor eyes.
Anyways.
Your poem is fine, however I lost a bit of enthusiasm after I realized it was about cheating. It's probably just me, but it seemed cliche. I guess I've just read too many poems about people still loving their boyf/girlf even after they cheated.
On the other hand, you pulled it off very nicely. The following lines made me very impressed.
"Because someone who loves you
Would not have been able to do what you did."
"And now you expect me to stand around and wait.
‘Who knows what will happen’, you say,
Like you never broke my heart."
Those three lines are powerful. It's something new that I haven't seen in a poem like this-the cheater not completely leaving the cheated, but stringing them along.
Keep writing,
~Con
2Unknown Error 4.0I think this poem is good. Actually, both of your poems are good. I like the formatting, it really goes easy on these poor eyes.
Anyways.
Your poem is fine, however I lost a bit of enthusiasm after I realized it was about cheating. It's probably just me, but it seemed cliche. I guess I've just read too many poems about people still loving their boyf/girlf even after they cheated.
On the other hand, you pulled it off very nicely. The following lines made me very impressed.
"Because someone who loves you
Would not have been able to do what you did."
"And now you expect me to stand around and wait.
‘Who knows what will happen’, you say,
Like you never broke my heart."
Those three lines are powerful. It's something new that I haven't seen in a poem like this-the cheater not completely leaving the cheated, but stringing them along.
Keep writing,
~Con
3/23/2009 c1 the-ever-changing-name
woa that was deep i was in that same situation great writing skills well done! i like the song you will be loved by death cab for cutie it gave me good perspective on my situation and some comfort, but never got over the pain T_T
anyways well written
XD
woa that was deep i was in that same situation great writing skills well done! i like the song you will be loved by death cab for cutie it gave me good perspective on my situation and some comfort, but never got over the pain T_T
anyways well written
XD
3/21/2009 c1 77A Sweet Escape
Such a sad poem...there's a friend of mine that I know can really relate to this. The couplet at the end is my favorite part. Good job.
xkatt
77A Sweet EscapeSuch a sad poem...there's a friend of mine that I know can really relate to this. The couplet at the end is my favorite part. Good job.
xkatt