for Win4/28/2009 c1 
1Maelaun
Sis...this has inspired my true motives for dancing. Whereas I do not wish to persue it on famous stages, I wish to preform it on many unseen stages around the world, from every culture...I could tell from the title that this story would be about you, and you know what? You deserved that trophy, because trophies do not always go to the stonger or faster man, but sooner of later, the person who wins is the fellow who thinks she can. Excellent job, Sis.
1MaelaunSis...this has inspired my true motives for dancing. Whereas I do not wish to persue it on famous stages, I wish to preform it on many unseen stages around the world, from every culture...I could tell from the title that this story would be about you, and you know what? You deserved that trophy, because trophies do not always go to the stonger or faster man, but sooner of later, the person who wins is the fellow who thinks she can. Excellent job, Sis.
3/21/2009 c1 FuckMeAlice
In the name of the Review Marathon!
There are a couple of places where I would have insert commas to help with flow. This, for instance:
Well (,) it wasn't really a market area (,) just a place where a few people sold things.
I like the feeling in the piece- the narrator's passion for dance really comes through and makes me think about the things I love, thereby making me happy.
-Stardust.
In the name of the Review Marathon!
There are a couple of places where I would have insert commas to help with flow. This, for instance:
Well (,) it wasn't really a market area (,) just a place where a few people sold things.
I like the feeling in the piece- the narrator's passion for dance really comes through and makes me think about the things I love, thereby making me happy.
-Stardust.
2/16/2009 c1 1DiceQueen
Yeah you really did do a good job ^^
...DQ...
PS. Did you pass you english assignment? Cause I think it should be one of the top marks ^^
1DiceQueenYeah you really did do a good job ^^
...DQ...
PS. Did you pass you english assignment? Cause I think it should be one of the top marks ^^
2/16/2009 c1 138lael1bologna
I sort of got it; it was about dancing right? What kind of dancing? But I liked the story! good shot-shot!
138lael1bolognaI sort of got it; it was about dancing right? What kind of dancing? But I liked the story! good shot-shot!