for Through the Closet Door10/11/2010 c1 
5thefaultinourpatronus
You're putting yourself down in my opinion, I don't think you're too bad! I can't exactly see where this story's headed, but I'm sure you've got some ideas in mind :) The plot's good, the characters seem realistic enough.. Good start! Good luck on completing your story!
x mandy
5thefaultinourpatronusYou're putting yourself down in my opinion, I don't think you're too bad! I can't exactly see where this story's headed, but I'm sure you've got some ideas in mind :) The plot's good, the characters seem realistic enough.. Good start! Good luck on completing your story!
x mandy
10/1/2010 c1 20diwu6398
Aw, poor NOP! Only one review :(
Well, if it's not obvious by my profile or my favorites list, I love slash. Which this isn't, but that's okay. I sound so mean! I like other stuff besides slash! It's just what I read most. Okay, I'm going to shut up before I make myself look like more of an idiot.
First thing: The summary was great. It had a brief little synopsis that wasn't boring or stupid-sounding. Good job on that.
Second: The first chapter wasn't as great as I think it could have been. You are truly a marvelous writer, I can see, but it seems like you wanted the reader to know everything, right from the start. (Well, you didn't give the plot away entirely, but there was a lot of back story in it).
Third: First person can be limiting because of the amount of things you can call yourself unless you're Elmo or Julius Caesar in Shakespeare's version. But you seemed to do well with that.
I think that's it. Mainly because if I think of a fourth thing I'll have to think of a fifth, so I'll just leave it at that. If my jumbled mess of text confused you or you had any questions whatsoever about what I just said, feel free to let me know. By the way, this is a good review, not a bad. In case you're befuzzled by that. I think I just made up a word.
20diwu6398Aw, poor NOP! Only one review :(
Well, if it's not obvious by my profile or my favorites list, I love slash. Which this isn't, but that's okay. I sound so mean! I like other stuff besides slash! It's just what I read most. Okay, I'm going to shut up before I make myself look like more of an idiot.
First thing: The summary was great. It had a brief little synopsis that wasn't boring or stupid-sounding. Good job on that.
Second: The first chapter wasn't as great as I think it could have been. You are truly a marvelous writer, I can see, but it seems like you wanted the reader to know everything, right from the start. (Well, you didn't give the plot away entirely, but there was a lot of back story in it).
Third: First person can be limiting because of the amount of things you can call yourself unless you're Elmo or Julius Caesar in Shakespeare's version. But you seemed to do well with that.
I think that's it. Mainly because if I think of a fourth thing I'll have to think of a fifth, so I'll just leave it at that. If my jumbled mess of text confused you or you had any questions whatsoever about what I just said, feel free to let me know. By the way, this is a good review, not a bad. In case you're befuzzled by that. I think I just made up a word.