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3/2/2009 c1 9Alteng
Okay, I told you I would try to get to itr Sunday night. The bus has the wi-fi thing going, so here I am.

I am surprised that you didn't put in a comment about his second wife, because Alteng went into isolation after she died until the brother dragged him out of hiding for a few years. He really got back into the thick of things once Narrinda came into his life.

Other than that, the poem is sweet and painful.

You did one typo that I saw, and that was the Its on the next to last stanza. It should have the '.

And, you know that I am not poetically inclined, so I have no comment to make about the structure or what not.
2/27/2009 c1 13Tsumujikaze no Soujutsu
Herro there! Well, glad to review back again. :) Anyway, that was a good work here. For some reason, this poem reminds me of what one might see in a fantasy romance. I like the way you did the feelings here. It seemed rather realistic to me and it really reached out to the reader. I really wonder what were all the things the narrator went through although I do think it was quite a lot before he became famous here. Anyway, interesting work here and yeah, thanks for your reviews on A Ranger's Tale all the while. Hope to see more of your reviews for my other stories as well soon. Maybe you will want to start with Seal of valor since it's the most recently updated one? ;)
2/27/2009 c1 9Narq
Aww... this was so sad but wonderfully written! This is just fabulous! Well done!


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