for The Story You Shouldn't Know5/4/2011 c18 
2Gracie Girlie
I saw this on the SKOW nominations page so thought I would take a look. I am HOOKED to this story :) The plot is so original. I haven't seen a story like this on FP in a long time and I can't stop reading! Perfect procrastination reading!
2Gracie GirlieI saw this on the SKOW nominations page so thought I would take a look. I am HOOKED to this story :) The plot is so original. I haven't seen a story like this on FP in a long time and I can't stop reading! Perfect procrastination reading!
5/1/2011 c32 2Miss Haps
This entire story has probably been the most brilliant thing I've read in a really, REALLY long time. The plot and characters are incredibly beautiful, well written, and over all just lovely. I tip my hat to you because damn, you have unbelievable talent and I must admit, I'm ridiculously jealous. ;P
Where did you get the idea for this story? The complexity of the plot still amazes me, but I'm mostly astounded by how well you executed it! YOU ROCK.
But seriously, how did you come up with this? Because I'm sure if everyone were as creative and brilliant as you, there would be less suck in the world... Then again, I do like Josh being around and he kind of is the root of world suck :D
Again... keep it up because after reading this, I'm convinced you're made of awesome.
2Miss HapsThis entire story has probably been the most brilliant thing I've read in a really, REALLY long time. The plot and characters are incredibly beautiful, well written, and over all just lovely. I tip my hat to you because damn, you have unbelievable talent and I must admit, I'm ridiculously jealous. ;P
Where did you get the idea for this story? The complexity of the plot still amazes me, but I'm mostly astounded by how well you executed it! YOU ROCK.
But seriously, how did you come up with this? Because I'm sure if everyone were as creative and brilliant as you, there would be less suck in the world... Then again, I do like Josh being around and he kind of is the root of world suck :D
Again... keep it up because after reading this, I'm convinced you're made of awesome.
4/17/2011 c11 Sult-an Peper
let me start by saying, your story is awesome!
I fell in love with Josh, right in the begining. And this chapter is the one that really makes me read it again and again. Especially the last part *wink*
let me start by saying, your story is awesome!
I fell in love with Josh, right in the begining. And this chapter is the one that really makes me read it again and again. Especially the last part *wink*
4/9/2011 c32 Grapetastic
This story is beautiful. I think that's the only way I can adequately describe it. I read the entire thing within one night and I absolutely love it. Not only are your characters humane, and actually humane, but they're fun. And normal. Well, as normal as one can be with Satan and half-angels. Kudos to you, seriously, for writing something so awesome.
This story is beautiful. I think that's the only way I can adequately describe it. I read the entire thing within one night and I absolutely love it. Not only are your characters humane, and actually humane, but they're fun. And normal. Well, as normal as one can be with Satan and half-angels. Kudos to you, seriously, for writing something so awesome.
3/25/2011 c32 saberloli
Ok-ay. So, I just want to know, was the Origin, Anna's mother and father? Because, you know. I just feel it. I like the story, like, you should, publish it. It's like, it's really unbelievably believable. See? To express it, my words doesn't even make sense! Anyway, what happened to Marcus? Creepy, I have a, let's say, unlikely-guy-looking-or-acting friend, with the same name. And oh! Just to tell you, I can never, never ever get over this story. Proof? I'll spread it, like an addicted cheerleader to gossip. Another proof, let's say, I watch this movie, Knowing. Because I almost believed it, almost, I still didn't got over it. I viewed it, like once, complete, and twice, incomplete. Let's say, it was shown last,last,last year. And I didn't even get over it. How about this? This story will haunt me, forever. I'll spread it, specially, emphasizing the sentence 'it's the story you shouldn't know'. I was so starstruck. I'm so sorry if this will pour some guilt on you but, I was like, the most curious God forsaken person that was ever created in Earth. So this will most likely put me most of the time into daze, maybe into deep thinking. I was starting to think now 'What if God made her write this, so we can know, the story we shouldn't know?' Gosh, that doesn't even make sense! So back to the story, what happened, specifically, detailed, to Anna and Josh. And I'll tell you a secret. Oosh, I have said too many. Now, bye. I really, really, want you to know, you should really publish it. That's how good it is.
Ok-ay. So, I just want to know, was the Origin, Anna's mother and father? Because, you know. I just feel it. I like the story, like, you should, publish it. It's like, it's really unbelievably believable. See? To express it, my words doesn't even make sense! Anyway, what happened to Marcus? Creepy, I have a, let's say, unlikely-guy-looking-or-acting friend, with the same name. And oh! Just to tell you, I can never, never ever get over this story. Proof? I'll spread it, like an addicted cheerleader to gossip. Another proof, let's say, I watch this movie, Knowing. Because I almost believed it, almost, I still didn't got over it. I viewed it, like once, complete, and twice, incomplete. Let's say, it was shown last,last,last year. And I didn't even get over it. How about this? This story will haunt me, forever. I'll spread it, specially, emphasizing the sentence 'it's the story you shouldn't know'. I was so starstruck. I'm so sorry if this will pour some guilt on you but, I was like, the most curious God forsaken person that was ever created in Earth. So this will most likely put me most of the time into daze, maybe into deep thinking. I was starting to think now 'What if God made her write this, so we can know, the story we shouldn't know?' Gosh, that doesn't even make sense! So back to the story, what happened, specifically, detailed, to Anna and Josh. And I'll tell you a secret. Oosh, I have said too many. Now, bye. I really, really, want you to know, you should really publish it. That's how good it is.
3/24/2011 c31 MoManiac
This story seriously makes me want to die. It's amazing, but oh so depressing! You kind of just shove the mood down to crazy sadness ice cream, then throw happy sprinkles on top. It makes me sad. -.- great story, though. It really gets you thinking. I'm going to go read something happy now.
This story seriously makes me want to die. It's amazing, but oh so depressing! You kind of just shove the mood down to crazy sadness ice cream, then throw happy sprinkles on top. It makes me sad. -.- great story, though. It really gets you thinking. I'm going to go read something happy now.
3/24/2011 c32 bactrulus
woah this story is great! after reading so many stories on fictionpress, this is one of the few that i am actually inclined to re-read it. :D :D
do continue to write more stories! :D
woah this story is great! after reading so many stories on fictionpress, this is one of the few that i am actually inclined to re-read it. :D :D
do continue to write more stories! :D
3/21/2011 c3 swords dragons and diet coke
I love your writing style and how creative the plot is! Also, i love Anna, i really hope that josh doesn't get his way =/
I love your writing style and how creative the plot is! Also, i love Anna, i really hope that josh doesn't get his way =/
3/12/2011 c31 5Britt Woods
hahaha I just had this wonderful imagine of little Josh and little Anna appearing on people's shoulders and arguing over what that person should do. You know, like the cliche angel/devil thing in movies sometimes?
This story was very brilliantly done. I liked where the plot went entirely and can't think of any way I'd want it to change. I think it's interesting that the last thing Anna and Josh did was, essentially, create free will. It gives the story a very legitimate and real quality for who ever is reading it. I think, with how unique this idea is, you should definitely consider publishing this book someday.
Good job and thank you for posting :)
5Britt Woodshahaha I just had this wonderful imagine of little Josh and little Anna appearing on people's shoulders and arguing over what that person should do. You know, like the cliche angel/devil thing in movies sometimes?
This story was very brilliantly done. I liked where the plot went entirely and can't think of any way I'd want it to change. I think it's interesting that the last thing Anna and Josh did was, essentially, create free will. It gives the story a very legitimate and real quality for who ever is reading it. I think, with how unique this idea is, you should definitely consider publishing this book someday.
Good job and thank you for posting :)
3/12/2011 c30 Britt Woods
So The Wolf was the first son. I wish I could remember what made me think that in the first place.
As a conclusion, I thought this was pretty perfect. Josh thought about (though this may have been in Chapter 28) how he really hadn't given up anything for Anna and I was glad you'd touched on that. It had kind of bothered me. I respected that he didn't want her to give up herself, but he couldn't give up any bit of himself. I think that made so much sense because learning to sacrifice even the smallest thing for the person you love takes time. Love was so knew to Josh that I think he just felt for a long time that if he loved Anna and kept her happy, it would be all she needed.
The two of them really couldn't have been together in any conventional way. Their ending makes perfect sense.
So The Wolf was the first son. I wish I could remember what made me think that in the first place.
As a conclusion, I thought this was pretty perfect. Josh thought about (though this may have been in Chapter 28) how he really hadn't given up anything for Anna and I was glad you'd touched on that. It had kind of bothered me. I respected that he didn't want her to give up herself, but he couldn't give up any bit of himself. I think that made so much sense because learning to sacrifice even the smallest thing for the person you love takes time. Love was so knew to Josh that I think he just felt for a long time that if he loved Anna and kept her happy, it would be all she needed.
The two of them really couldn't have been together in any conventional way. Their ending makes perfect sense.
3/12/2011 c20 Britt Woods
My favorite part:
Hussein shook his head at her, his expression pitying. "Anna, you've been trying too hard … you've got to understand that there are some things you need to accept. You used to know that."
Because:
I've been wondering how Anna's powers - especially the new 'control' (not necessarily the word I want, but it will do) over the devil - would effect her. Especially since she's more human right now than angel... at least that's the gist I got from some earlier A/Ns. I think the Angel in Anna can keep her from being completely seduced by it as a full blown human might be, but you can see her own power beginning to shock and terrify her. Mostly when she has a confrontation with one of the other students. I think Hussein's statement describes what I feel could be a huge internal conflict for Anna.
Also, I really like how her "I love you" moment wasn't a big deal. It's like love just happened to her. Out of nowhere. Like she woke up with a zit one morning in an "Oh. That's new" kind of way. However, I'm still so torn about Josh. I get that he's awesome in her eyes and he really does love her, but he is still evil. Josh's love for Anna didn't make him any less evil... it only made him feel. I'm reluctant to trust him because of that... because it makes sense for him to have some giant evil moment in the future.
Well done :)
My favorite part:
Hussein shook his head at her, his expression pitying. "Anna, you've been trying too hard … you've got to understand that there are some things you need to accept. You used to know that."
Because:
I've been wondering how Anna's powers - especially the new 'control' (not necessarily the word I want, but it will do) over the devil - would effect her. Especially since she's more human right now than angel... at least that's the gist I got from some earlier A/Ns. I think the Angel in Anna can keep her from being completely seduced by it as a full blown human might be, but you can see her own power beginning to shock and terrify her. Mostly when she has a confrontation with one of the other students. I think Hussein's statement describes what I feel could be a huge internal conflict for Anna.
Also, I really like how her "I love you" moment wasn't a big deal. It's like love just happened to her. Out of nowhere. Like she woke up with a zit one morning in an "Oh. That's new" kind of way. However, I'm still so torn about Josh. I get that he's awesome in her eyes and he really does love her, but he is still evil. Josh's love for Anna didn't make him any less evil... it only made him feel. I'm reluctant to trust him because of that... because it makes sense for him to have some giant evil moment in the future.
Well done :)
3/12/2011 c18 Britt Woods
I'll probably end up reviewing pretty often from now on, but I doubt you mind hah This is just a short one, though.
I really enjoy how you toy around with the subjectivity of good and evil. I think good and evil are sometimes very staunchly black and white, but some things are really left up to individual perspective.
Also, I am interested to have a lot of questions about the Wolf answered. For a minute I thought he might be one of Satan's failed experiments, but I'm not so sure now. The relationship between him and Josh is a huge question mark for me.
I'll probably end up reviewing pretty often from now on, but I doubt you mind hah This is just a short one, though.
I really enjoy how you toy around with the subjectivity of good and evil. I think good and evil are sometimes very staunchly black and white, but some things are really left up to individual perspective.
Also, I am interested to have a lot of questions about the Wolf answered. For a minute I thought he might be one of Satan's failed experiments, but I'm not so sure now. The relationship between him and Josh is a huge question mark for me.
3/12/2011 c17 Britt Woods
This story is incredibly well written. I hope this won't sound condescending or offensive, but I was seriously shocked when I read you only started writing it at fourteen. Crazy.
I think you've done an especially exceptional job with Josh and Anna's relationship. I know that Josh is evil. He's responsible for every terrible thing in the world and he likes that about himself. He's arrogant and cruel. I totally get all of these things. Yet, I find myself feeling the same things about his character that Anna does. Maybe because readers are only seeing the side of him that is good to Anna? Still, he is the devil. It makes sense - as far has the devil is described in modern mythology - that he'd be so charming. The duplicity in his character really fascinates me and you've portrayed it very well.
I'm looking forward to seeing where this story goes!
This story is incredibly well written. I hope this won't sound condescending or offensive, but I was seriously shocked when I read you only started writing it at fourteen. Crazy.
I think you've done an especially exceptional job with Josh and Anna's relationship. I know that Josh is evil. He's responsible for every terrible thing in the world and he likes that about himself. He's arrogant and cruel. I totally get all of these things. Yet, I find myself feeling the same things about his character that Anna does. Maybe because readers are only seeing the side of him that is good to Anna? Still, he is the devil. It makes sense - as far has the devil is described in modern mythology - that he'd be so charming. The duplicity in his character really fascinates me and you've portrayed it very well.
I'm looking forward to seeing where this story goes!
3/3/2011 c31 2MuffinsRoxSox
This was seriously one of the BEST stories that I have ever read. It was truely AMAZING. Even if the end was a bit confusing. And a bit(lot)...shocking. It was very unexpected and it was wonderful. I read this because I was looking through the SKoW Awards' nominees, and i mean, it wouldn't be fair if you just voted without reading all of the stories first, would it? So this was the first that I read out of the category, I think. If not, then oh well. But again, AMAZING JOB. And I seriously did cry for the last few chapters. Like, sobbing. I'm emotional, don't judge me!
2MuffinsRoxSoxThis was seriously one of the BEST stories that I have ever read. It was truely AMAZING. Even if the end was a bit confusing. And a bit(lot)...shocking. It was very unexpected and it was wonderful. I read this because I was looking through the SKoW Awards' nominees, and i mean, it wouldn't be fair if you just voted without reading all of the stories first, would it? So this was the first that I read out of the category, I think. If not, then oh well. But again, AMAZING JOB. And I seriously did cry for the last few chapters. Like, sobbing. I'm emotional, don't judge me!