for Silence3/4/2009 c1 
3Talvez
You paint a strong image of silence in this poem. It feels so calming and yet waiting for something that we do not know but should be afraid of!
One little thing~you may need a comma in the second stanza after sadness because the next phrase describes 'the sadness'.
"Silence can be the sadness the absence of happy noise"
I love the concept of silence.
Thank you for sharing this poem!
3TalvezYou paint a strong image of silence in this poem. It feels so calming and yet waiting for something that we do not know but should be afraid of!
One little thing~you may need a comma in the second stanza after sadness because the next phrase describes 'the sadness'.
"Silence can be the sadness the absence of happy noise"
I love the concept of silence.
Thank you for sharing this poem!
3/4/2009 c1 35vendettalexicon
You might want to pick through the cliches so its not so much of a nuisance to read.
=Manic
35vendettalexiconYou might want to pick through the cliches so its not so much of a nuisance to read.
=Manic