for Rantings of a Kind3/27/2009 c2 
4Jasey Rae
these are the things that make my head spin!
I just wrote a term paper about Jack Kerouac's On the Road, and the main subject was about how they are searching for a form of perfection, but they don't know what it is. it blew my mind, it was so interesting.
nice job with the perfection chapter, i liked it.
4Jasey Raethese are the things that make my head spin!
I just wrote a term paper about Jack Kerouac's On the Road, and the main subject was about how they are searching for a form of perfection, but they don't know what it is. it blew my mind, it was so interesting.
nice job with the perfection chapter, i liked it.
3/14/2009 c2 20Thousand Writer
Nice little rant. Both of them. These are usually the type of topics that, I think, pops into our head.
Kinda made me think about how one person can make a difference, and how powerful and powerless we can be in many cases.
Actually, thinking in general is an interesting topic, but I'll save that for another time.
Good piece overall.
20Thousand WriterNice little rant. Both of them. These are usually the type of topics that, I think, pops into our head.
Kinda made me think about how one person can make a difference, and how powerful and powerless we can be in many cases.
Actually, thinking in general is an interesting topic, but I'll save that for another time.
Good piece overall.
3/11/2009 c1 23Glass Queen
Oh, nice. I like the last line. Overall great piece, some small grammar stuff here and there, but nothing to worry about.
-Kaitrin
23Glass QueenOh, nice. I like the last line. Overall great piece, some small grammar stuff here and there, but nothing to worry about.
-Kaitrin
3/11/2009 c2 Ernest Bloom
i think imperfections are the wellspring of beauty,
although i've never known why. probably because
they are the door that invites us in, that allows
us to relate, we all being imperfect. again, you
make an assertion without concrete examples to
support it. you declare the concept of perfection
to be over-rated, but you give no examples. i would
say that practically all writing is vastly improved
by including two things: (1) human characters who
are present in some form or other, and (2) sensory
detail, including visual, but more importantly sounds,
scents, flavors, physical textures, heat and cold, and
so on. if you will always strive consciously to remember
to include those two simple elements, i predict all of
your writing will rapidly improve very much. luck.
i think imperfections are the wellspring of beauty,
although i've never known why. probably because
they are the door that invites us in, that allows
us to relate, we all being imperfect. again, you
make an assertion without concrete examples to
support it. you declare the concept of perfection
to be over-rated, but you give no examples. i would
say that practically all writing is vastly improved
by including two things: (1) human characters who
are present in some form or other, and (2) sensory
detail, including visual, but more importantly sounds,
scents, flavors, physical textures, heat and cold, and
so on. if you will always strive consciously to remember
to include those two simple elements, i predict all of
your writing will rapidly improve very much. luck.
3/11/2009 c1 Ernest Bloom
i think a long time ago david bowie had something
to say on this subject. i admire your optimism,
but the fact is that fiction writing's not so much
about what one says as how he says it. the weakness
of this piece is the absence of specificity. you
are vague, not concrete. the best writing is
specific and concrete. _name_ the groups who are
the problem, and make that the _start_ of your rant.
point out how they try to arrest change out of fear
of a future they don't control. etc. luck.
i think a long time ago david bowie had something
to say on this subject. i admire your optimism,
but the fact is that fiction writing's not so much
about what one says as how he says it. the weakness
of this piece is the absence of specificity. you
are vague, not concrete. the best writing is
specific and concrete. _name_ the groups who are
the problem, and make that the _start_ of your rant.
point out how they try to arrest change out of fear
of a future they don't control. etc. luck.