for Lucky3/26/2012 c1 witeaya
i hope walter will be more than a shallow man who only like someone bc of her appearances.
i hope walter will be more than a shallow man who only like someone bc of her appearances.
8/1/2010 c24 Da-zGreen
Aw. What a great story! I so totally cried. This was really fraustrating because Lucky wouldn't listen to Walker but he eventually said those three words. I'm gald it ended with a nice ending. Can't wait to read more of your stories! You are a great writer!
Aw. What a great story! I so totally cried. This was really fraustrating because Lucky wouldn't listen to Walker but he eventually said those three words. I'm gald it ended with a nice ending. Can't wait to read more of your stories! You are a great writer!
2/13/2010 c24 animegirl214
hahahaha. aw~
that's so cute! :D :D :D :D
thanks so much for this story! :)
hahahaha. aw~
that's so cute! :D :D :D :D
thanks so much for this story! :)
1/18/2010 c23 anonymous
This is a brilliant story! I love it!
Just one thing:
"How come you won’t come home with me and Dad?"
"Dad and I."
Dakota is actually using correct grammar. Think of it this way, she wouldn't say "How come you won't come home with I?", would she? =D A lot of people do think the correct form is "Dad and I" - heck, I even did until my mom corrected me! =D
This is a brilliant story! I love it!
Just one thing:
"How come you won’t come home with me and Dad?"
"Dad and I."
Dakota is actually using correct grammar. Think of it this way, she wouldn't say "How come you won't come home with I?", would she? =D A lot of people do think the correct form is "Dad and I" - heck, I even did until my mom corrected me! =D
7/31/2009 c24 
2Amber DeFabio
Very, very cute story. There were a few grammar and spelling mistakes, but other than that, I read the whole thing in one day. It was addicting. I loved it.
2Amber DeFabioVery, very cute story. There were a few grammar and spelling mistakes, but other than that, I read the whole thing in one day. It was addicting. I loved it.
6/23/2009 c21 reader
AH what's WRONG with Walker?
AH what's WRONG with Walker?
6/10/2009 c24 Emily
Enjoyed this story a lot. Good job. The only critique I have would be Sandra - her total character change seems a little unbelievable, but I do understand how you got there. I liked how Lucky was reluctant the majority of the time in her relationship with Walker but there were occasions she let her heart take control. Talk about mixed messages; poor Walker.
Anyways, I liked it overall. Thanks for taking the time to write and post it. :)
Enjoyed this story a lot. Good job. The only critique I have would be Sandra - her total character change seems a little unbelievable, but I do understand how you got there. I liked how Lucky was reluctant the majority of the time in her relationship with Walker but there were occasions she let her heart take control. Talk about mixed messages; poor Walker.
Anyways, I liked it overall. Thanks for taking the time to write and post it. :)
5/30/2009 c24 Wunder
Hello, hello.
Nice story. It was an interesting idea. I appreciated that the rushed marriage didn't turn out too terribly cliche.
For some constructive criticism, there were a few spots where I noticed grammar errors, but a Beta reader could easily fix that up for you. I think you may have made a slight miscalculation with the dates... Shouldn't Dakota have turned 10 at some point turning the story? Also, I don't think it needs to be rated R. In fact, there's nothing in this story that is worthy of an R rating. I think perhaps you should switch it to T, and you'll get more readers.
Again, lovely story! =)
-Wunder
Hello, hello.
Nice story. It was an interesting idea. I appreciated that the rushed marriage didn't turn out too terribly cliche.
For some constructive criticism, there were a few spots where I noticed grammar errors, but a Beta reader could easily fix that up for you. I think you may have made a slight miscalculation with the dates... Shouldn't Dakota have turned 10 at some point turning the story? Also, I don't think it needs to be rated R. In fact, there's nothing in this story that is worthy of an R rating. I think perhaps you should switch it to T, and you'll get more readers.
Again, lovely story! =)
-Wunder