for Flowing Rain7/29/2012 c1 
18Bushwah
I can't think of anything to say that hasn't been said before.
That said... thank you.
18BushwahI can't think of anything to say that hasn't been said before.
That said... thank you.
2/18/2011 c1 1Splash Where Tear Drops
Quick and short-I like it.
Suggestions:
Rain {I suggest a title like: Earthen Aspects, or something that describes what you are talking about.}
Rain,
Dropping from the tall sky.
Fire,
Burning ever so brightly without ever knowing why.
Mud,
Mixed with with tears, why cry?
Rock,
Hardens with time passing by.
Noticed I added commas at the end? It works better (My opinion). Cute short poem, really good.
Happy writing! ;D
1Splash Where Tear DropsQuick and short-I like it.
Suggestions:
Rain {I suggest a title like: Earthen Aspects, or something that describes what you are talking about.}
Rain,
Dropping from the tall sky.
Fire,
Burning ever so brightly without ever knowing why.
Mud,
Mixed with with tears, why cry?
Rock,
Hardens with time passing by.
Noticed I added commas at the end? It works better (My opinion). Cute short poem, really good.
Happy writing! ;D
1/4/2011 c1 Live Killers
ya know, when I read this, I imagine it in those sterotypical poetic room, with the poet dressed in a black t-shirt, black jeans and black vans.
When the audience silent and then snapping in the end
ya know, when I read this, I imagine it in those sterotypical poetic room, with the poet dressed in a black t-shirt, black jeans and black vans.
When the audience silent and then snapping in the end
3/17/2009 c1 13Wish Bone
I enjoy this poem for its simplicity. In fact, I believe that nothing but simplicity would do this topic any justice.
However, I have an issue with the line "Mix with tears, why cry?". I don't quite see the connection between mud and crying.
Good job!
You've got a wording error in there by the way, writing "with" twice in the seventh line.
13Wish BoneI enjoy this poem for its simplicity. In fact, I believe that nothing but simplicity would do this topic any justice.
However, I have an issue with the line "Mix with tears, why cry?". I don't quite see the connection between mud and crying.
Good job!
You've got a wording error in there by the way, writing "with" twice in the seventh line.