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7/29/2012 c1 18Bushwah
I can't think of anything to say that hasn't been said before.

That said... thank you.
2/18/2011 c1 1Splash Where Tear Drops
Quick and short-I like it.


Rain {I suggest a title like: Earthen Aspects, or something that describes what you are talking about.}


Dropping from the tall sky.


Burning ever so brightly without ever knowing why.


Mixed with with tears, why cry?


Hardens with time passing by.

Noticed I added commas at the end? It works better (My opinion). Cute short poem, really good.

Happy writing! ;D
1/4/2011 c1 Live Killers
ya know, when I read this, I imagine it in those sterotypical poetic room, with the poet dressed in a black t-shirt, black jeans and black vans.

When the audience silent and then snapping in the end
3/17/2009 c1 13Wish Bone
I enjoy this poem for its simplicity. In fact, I believe that nothing but simplicity would do this topic any justice.

However, I have an issue with the line "Mix with tears, why cry?". I don't quite see the connection between mud and crying.

Good job!

You've got a wording error in there by the way, writing "with" twice in the seventh line.

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