for You Never Know6/20/2012 c1 anon
damn, that was so sweet and...i loved it.
damn, that was so sweet and...i loved it.
1/28/2012 c1 
4Regal Coat Woman's Daughter
I like these characters, I wish you wrote more about them... Sequel maybe _
4Regal Coat Woman's DaughterI like these characters, I wish you wrote more about them... Sequel maybe _
12/25/2011 c1 AdriannaRomantica
NNNNNNNNNNNNNOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO! I didn't want it to end! Very nice short story. You always write the stories I love! Yet another cute couple; too bad this wasn't longer :/
Thanks for sharing!
NNNNNNNNNNNNNOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO! I didn't want it to end! Very nice short story. You always write the stories I love! Yet another cute couple; too bad this wasn't longer :/
Thanks for sharing!
10/18/2011 c1 3VirtuallyClever
Hey! It's me! I'm finally reviewing a story!
omg, I just loved, loved, loved this to death!
u rock. :D
3VirtuallyCleverHey! It's me! I'm finally reviewing a story!
omg, I just loved, loved, loved this to death!
u rock. :D
8/5/2011 c1 2theDJK
Ok...1st let's be professional: I loved the dynamic between the two and also them by themselves. "Rio" was just an in and out no nonsense lets get this over with type of person. I liked that about him.
The back and forth of both of their perspectives was great. I enjoyed it.
Now, not so professional: I'm still hard! Lol
2theDJKOk...1st let's be professional: I loved the dynamic between the two and also them by themselves. "Rio" was just an in and out no nonsense lets get this over with type of person. I liked that about him.
The back and forth of both of their perspectives was great. I enjoyed it.
Now, not so professional: I'm still hard! Lol
5/9/2011 c1 6Feeshes
I dunno why but I found this story oddly adorable...
You know, you have an interesting love of prostitutes and large age gaps, you know that? It's amazing. I should have you read a story I'm writing. I still need ta find a beta though, cuz I suck at editing my own work. I dun' have the attention span for it. It's bad enough typing up shit I've written.
ANYway. Back to your writing, I dunno why, but I really love this old man... He's so pathetic, ya know? Like...a dog that's gonna get on just fine but no matter how long you stare at the thing you know you are never gonna be able to just... Shoo it away.
..Jeffree Star's freaky. Damn you Hollywood Undead and your catchy tunes! XD
That enough ego stroking for tonight?
...Still sounds funny. XD
6FeeshesI dunno why but I found this story oddly adorable...
You know, you have an interesting love of prostitutes and large age gaps, you know that? It's amazing. I should have you read a story I'm writing. I still need ta find a beta though, cuz I suck at editing my own work. I dun' have the attention span for it. It's bad enough typing up shit I've written.
ANYway. Back to your writing, I dunno why, but I really love this old man... He's so pathetic, ya know? Like...a dog that's gonna get on just fine but no matter how long you stare at the thing you know you are never gonna be able to just... Shoo it away.
..Jeffree Star's freaky. Damn you Hollywood Undead and your catchy tunes! XD
That enough ego stroking for tonight?
...Still sounds funny. XD
4/30/2011 c1 16Ioga
Aw, this was so heartbreaking and eventually all-ends-well fairytale-cute at the same time. Another book on my papery todo list (paper just sucks, it loses my position when I have to put the book down and everything!) is a local piece "loosely based" on the author's brief career as a prostitute - and first and foremost a depiction of how that caused a similar kind of mental cocooning as Kyle's projecting.
Needless to say, I devoured this (and will have to finish the paper book too - accursed bookstores/publishers won't sell me the thing in unbroken electronic format). I admit I'm still trying to form some kind of educated opinion about prostitution as a profession, a few steps after I got over the phase in my personal feminism development where the booty shaking fad in music was demeaning (and now bothers me quite a bit less, as a result). As in, should it be done in state brothels and unions set up for the professionals, or is there some vague benefit in trying to keep it a strictly non-profession of more or less outlaws. (In comparison to not endorsing a business based on making people get well-paid to act as guinea pigs for experimentation even if it's their "choice" to work there and it somehow benefits parts of society, or the point that countless variants will escape any attempts at regulation anyway.) I do hope I don't set anyone aflame here now, I'm only getting started on trying to feel the different sides rather than just making assumptions based on how I personally work.
I've made some random notes of minor nitpicks like typoes I've found on all these stories, but then been too lazy to actually write them out for you. But this one had just two. "So maybe no one is ever really makes me feel better to think so, anyway." - something missing from the sentence. And "Nice to meet you Kyle." - I think there's usually a comma before the attached trailing name in sentences like this (i.e. between you and Kyle).
Thanks for this!
16IogaAw, this was so heartbreaking and eventually all-ends-well fairytale-cute at the same time. Another book on my papery todo list (paper just sucks, it loses my position when I have to put the book down and everything!) is a local piece "loosely based" on the author's brief career as a prostitute - and first and foremost a depiction of how that caused a similar kind of mental cocooning as Kyle's projecting.
Needless to say, I devoured this (and will have to finish the paper book too - accursed bookstores/publishers won't sell me the thing in unbroken electronic format). I admit I'm still trying to form some kind of educated opinion about prostitution as a profession, a few steps after I got over the phase in my personal feminism development where the booty shaking fad in music was demeaning (and now bothers me quite a bit less, as a result). As in, should it be done in state brothels and unions set up for the professionals, or is there some vague benefit in trying to keep it a strictly non-profession of more or less outlaws. (In comparison to not endorsing a business based on making people get well-paid to act as guinea pigs for experimentation even if it's their "choice" to work there and it somehow benefits parts of society, or the point that countless variants will escape any attempts at regulation anyway.) I do hope I don't set anyone aflame here now, I'm only getting started on trying to feel the different sides rather than just making assumptions based on how I personally work.
I've made some random notes of minor nitpicks like typoes I've found on all these stories, but then been too lazy to actually write them out for you. But this one had just two. "So maybe no one is ever really makes me feel better to think so, anyway." - something missing from the sentence. And "Nice to meet you Kyle." - I think there's usually a comma before the attached trailing name in sentences like this (i.e. between you and Kyle).
Thanks for this!
12/1/2010 c1 20diwu6398
Urg, I'm sort of a fail reviewer after six pm, so I'll try my best.
Oh. Oh my God. YOU OWN THE ENTIRE QAF SERIES? God, I've been watching that on megavideo and it sucks. YOU LUCKY DUCK!
Whoa. Did you just say that you're not gay? I've got to send you're url to my friend, who does not believe in straight yaoi lovers. Wait, I actually know one who didn't MIND mine, but he didn't really like it in general.
I don't really like yuri, and I'm a lesbian... weird. I prefer yaoi. But, I'm older than 14, which I'm sure that you'll be glad to hear. This reminds me that I was going to change my profile pic...
I read your entire profile, but in random order of paragraphs, which is why this doesn't make sense.
Hey, I should really review now, shouldn't I?
Kawaii! You should update!
I'm kidding. Of course, I do think that, but that's not ALL I have to say. I'm not THAT fail of a reviewer.
Okay, I loved the way that you started it out and your style. Your style... turns me on. Sorry if that sounds weird, but that's what I've been striving for for years. I usually hate first person, but this was incredible. It read somewhat similarly to an anime in which you hear/ see/ read in Japanese all of the character's thoughts. Fragments and stuff usually annoys me in writing, but I think it made it better in this. I liked how choosy he was in finding someone, and then how focused he was on Rio, and how generous he was. Another thing I liked was not knowing the real names until the end.
I'm sorry that I wrote this entire thing in past tense, but I'm rebelling from my English teacher. Which, if I hadn't already told you, gave me a 78% on my essay.
20diwu6398Urg, I'm sort of a fail reviewer after six pm, so I'll try my best.
Oh. Oh my God. YOU OWN THE ENTIRE QAF SERIES? God, I've been watching that on megavideo and it sucks. YOU LUCKY DUCK!
Whoa. Did you just say that you're not gay? I've got to send you're url to my friend, who does not believe in straight yaoi lovers. Wait, I actually know one who didn't MIND mine, but he didn't really like it in general.
I don't really like yuri, and I'm a lesbian... weird. I prefer yaoi. But, I'm older than 14, which I'm sure that you'll be glad to hear. This reminds me that I was going to change my profile pic...
I read your entire profile, but in random order of paragraphs, which is why this doesn't make sense.
Hey, I should really review now, shouldn't I?
Kawaii! You should update!
I'm kidding. Of course, I do think that, but that's not ALL I have to say. I'm not THAT fail of a reviewer.
Okay, I loved the way that you started it out and your style. Your style... turns me on. Sorry if that sounds weird, but that's what I've been striving for for years. I usually hate first person, but this was incredible. It read somewhat similarly to an anime in which you hear/ see/ read in Japanese all of the character's thoughts. Fragments and stuff usually annoys me in writing, but I think it made it better in this. I liked how choosy he was in finding someone, and then how focused he was on Rio, and how generous he was. Another thing I liked was not knowing the real names until the end.
I'm sorry that I wrote this entire thing in past tense, but I'm rebelling from my English teacher. Which, if I hadn't already told you, gave me a 78% on my essay.
11/17/2010 c1 2somegirly
I don't know what to say, I'm terrible at reviews but I just want to let you know that I really enjoyed this. I guess anything is better than ninja reading. I like the two characters. I'm looking forward to finding myself some time to sit and read more of your stories.
2somegirlyI don't know what to say, I'm terrible at reviews but I just want to let you know that I really enjoyed this. I guess anything is better than ninja reading. I like the two characters. I'm looking forward to finding myself some time to sit and read more of your stories.
9/1/2010 c1 17mousegirl05
I keep coming back to this story to read it. I must have read it at least four times by now. *laughs* When I accidentally clicked on the 'review' button, I was shocked to find that I could, because I thought surely I had already gushed over this wonderful work. Apparently not.
I like the simplicity of the dialogue and prose and their exchange. Furthermore, how they both keep such guarded hearts and yet almost instinctually, it seems, reach out to the other, it truly is lovely to read. There really is a half-hidden elegance in their exchange and the flow of the story. Well done. The very best part was that Mister/Brian sent Rio/Kyle's clothes out for wash. That, even more than the rest of his awesomeness, firmly established him as a thoughtful, kind individual.
I like to think that if you'd continued just one more dialogue set it would have been something like... "Uh... yeah... I would." *smiles* Even if you wouldn't have, in my mind, you have. I trust that you don't mind this.
I do realize that real life is busy and whatnot, but it would be lovely if you returned with updates to FP. ^.~
Cheers sir!
17mousegirl05I keep coming back to this story to read it. I must have read it at least four times by now. *laughs* When I accidentally clicked on the 'review' button, I was shocked to find that I could, because I thought surely I had already gushed over this wonderful work. Apparently not.
I like the simplicity of the dialogue and prose and their exchange. Furthermore, how they both keep such guarded hearts and yet almost instinctually, it seems, reach out to the other, it truly is lovely to read. There really is a half-hidden elegance in their exchange and the flow of the story. Well done. The very best part was that Mister/Brian sent Rio/Kyle's clothes out for wash. That, even more than the rest of his awesomeness, firmly established him as a thoughtful, kind individual.
I like to think that if you'd continued just one more dialogue set it would have been something like... "Uh... yeah... I would." *smiles* Even if you wouldn't have, in my mind, you have. I trust that you don't mind this.
I do realize that real life is busy and whatnot, but it would be lovely if you returned with updates to FP. ^.~
Cheers sir!
8/7/2010 c1 7A Spot of Tea
I kept wondering what happened in both characters pasts', and where exactly their futures were going to go. Great job with this, I loved it.
7A Spot of TeaI kept wondering what happened in both characters pasts', and where exactly their futures were going to go. Great job with this, I loved it.
7/17/2010 c1 1Rae Kitano
I love this story and the ending. I was reading and thinking dont let it end with them not going further. You didn't disappoint.
Rae.
1Rae KitanoI love this story and the ending. I was reading and thinking dont let it end with them not going further. You didn't disappoint.
Rae.
6/4/2010 c1 theearthisdoomed
That was sweet and cute. I really loved it. I have things to do, damnit, and yet here I am devouring your stories ;)
That was sweet and cute. I really loved it. I have things to do, damnit, and yet here I am devouring your stories ;)