for Shattered8/18/2009 c5 
6koijewel
I wait all this time for the sotry and then you have the guys embracing but nothing else. Where the hell is the passionate kissing? You fail in yaoi hon!
6koijewelI wait all this time for the sotry and then you have the guys embracing but nothing else. Where the hell is the passionate kissing? You fail in yaoi hon!
6/13/2009 c4 29prancu
Wow I'm seriously surprised you don't have more reviews already. Your story is very good. It has an interesting plotline and very likeable characters. It is also written very well with very minimal grammar and spelling mistakes. Which is good because stories that are full of them drive me crazy since I plan on being an editor. Anyway the only problem I see is that some of the situations just seem really unrealistic. But that's just what I think. Anyway in regard to the person who reviewed and said that you ruined it by using Japanese names, well no offense to them, but that's just stupid. It's your story and you can write it with whatever type of names you want. If they don't like it, they don't have to read it. Oh and your reason for writing this made me laugh. Good luck in your competition, and keep writing!
29prancuWow I'm seriously surprised you don't have more reviews already. Your story is very good. It has an interesting plotline and very likeable characters. It is also written very well with very minimal grammar and spelling mistakes. Which is good because stories that are full of them drive me crazy since I plan on being an editor. Anyway the only problem I see is that some of the situations just seem really unrealistic. But that's just what I think. Anyway in regard to the person who reviewed and said that you ruined it by using Japanese names, well no offense to them, but that's just stupid. It's your story and you can write it with whatever type of names you want. If they don't like it, they don't have to read it. Oh and your reason for writing this made me laugh. Good luck in your competition, and keep writing!
5/3/2009 c4 2ChaoticFenris
o It's getting better and better -cackles and rubs hands together- Your're doing a very good job! ^ ^
2ChaoticFenriso It's getting better and better -cackles and rubs hands together- Your're doing a very good job! ^ ^
5/3/2009 c1 2alwaysfaith
This would be a good story, except I don't like the names and places.
They're too Japanese. I'm betting you read manga and watch anime? I used to and I loved these names back then, but.. I'd rather read american names. If I wanted to read about japs, I'd read literature from japan.
But your writing is good. But the names.. they just annoy me. I can't read any more, even if I want to know what happens to them. It ruined the story for me.
2alwaysfaithThis would be a good story, except I don't like the names and places.
They're too Japanese. I'm betting you read manga and watch anime? I used to and I loved these names back then, but.. I'd rather read american names. If I wanted to read about japs, I'd read literature from japan.
But your writing is good. But the names.. they just annoy me. I can't read any more, even if I want to know what happens to them. It ruined the story for me.
3/22/2009 c1 lpluver
haha. That is the funniest thing I've read so far - a straight man writing slash. (from your profile) Anywaz good luck on owning your girlfriend. I like the story so far, hoping to read more.
-lpluver
By the way does your girlfriend have a account here?
haha. That is the funniest thing I've read so far - a straight man writing slash. (from your profile) Anywaz good luck on owning your girlfriend. I like the story so far, hoping to read more.
-lpluver
By the way does your girlfriend have a account here?