for Rock and a Hard Place3/23/2009 c1 Hemii25
Bring on the virtual cookie... =D
And bring on the next chapter (Or else... I'll chuck my virtual cookie at you. lol)! OMG Jayke (Love the unique way you spelled that) sounds like a babe. XD Kelsey... i had a bestfreind named Kelsey (notice the passed tense in the word HAD... ugh teenage drama) anyways... i really liked the way you started your story and even more... your summary is genius-totally capturing. I did spot a few grammatical errors but i'm not one to talk... my grammar sucks. Though i'm not to fond of the main characters name i like her attitude and the personality i'm assuming she has. This is totally a story i'm going to watch out for. I'm curious to know the reason for the title. I can't wait to find out.
and if you need help with a plot... lets say (because u said Jayke was rich) his parents are really snobbish and they don't like Kelsey for their son because she's not rich. or Jayke has a girlfriend already and his girlfriend happens to be a really big b*tch and when Jayke is showing signs of crushing on kelsey (i assume they'll fall for one another because you said this was a romance) his girlfriend, lets call her Meanie, finds out she goes to the girls that had originally stuffed Kelsey in the locker and they...idk... mess her up and talk sh*t? you pick what they do. OR Kelsey could have a guy crushing on her while she's crushing on Jayke and when the guy finds out he could...idk you pick.
this isn't my story so you don't have to choose any of my ideas. i'm just trying to help you develop a plot so you can update sooner.
This is a long review so i'll bring it to a halt. (I tend to talk too much. in this case TYPE)
Review soon... unless you like virtual cookies aimed at your cranium. XD haha bye.
Bring on the virtual cookie... =D
And bring on the next chapter (Or else... I'll chuck my virtual cookie at you. lol)! OMG Jayke (Love the unique way you spelled that) sounds like a babe. XD Kelsey... i had a bestfreind named Kelsey (notice the passed tense in the word HAD... ugh teenage drama) anyways... i really liked the way you started your story and even more... your summary is genius-totally capturing. I did spot a few grammatical errors but i'm not one to talk... my grammar sucks. Though i'm not to fond of the main characters name i like her attitude and the personality i'm assuming she has. This is totally a story i'm going to watch out for. I'm curious to know the reason for the title. I can't wait to find out.
and if you need help with a plot... lets say (because u said Jayke was rich) his parents are really snobbish and they don't like Kelsey for their son because she's not rich. or Jayke has a girlfriend already and his girlfriend happens to be a really big b*tch and when Jayke is showing signs of crushing on kelsey (i assume they'll fall for one another because you said this was a romance) his girlfriend, lets call her Meanie, finds out she goes to the girls that had originally stuffed Kelsey in the locker and they...idk... mess her up and talk sh*t? you pick what they do. OR Kelsey could have a guy crushing on her while she's crushing on Jayke and when the guy finds out he could...idk you pick.
this isn't my story so you don't have to choose any of my ideas. i'm just trying to help you develop a plot so you can update sooner.
This is a long review so i'll bring it to a halt. (I tend to talk too much. in this case TYPE)
Review soon... unless you like virtual cookies aimed at your cranium. XD haha bye.
3/22/2009 c1 
1AlphaBeatKayGee
i like the start that you have for this story! intriguingg and amusing! soo uhh update soon plz! i love updates..no need for a virtual cookie an update would be better =)
1AlphaBeatKayGeei like the start that you have for this story! intriguingg and amusing! soo uhh update soon plz! i love updates..no need for a virtual cookie an update would be better =)