for Dreaming8/5/2009 c1 
12Merovingian
"Songs sung unvoiced"-repetitive. Were you to ever look for errors in your work, delete the word "sung".
As for the meaning of your work: be careful toying with it. Amelia Atwater-Rhodes wrote five books, entitled he "Kiesha'Ra" series. Book three speaks of Ecl, a void created by spirit, imagination, and other things with unimaginable densities. Look it up, if you wish. I shall not retype words of warning, and thus steal them from their original author.
12Merovingian"Songs sung unvoiced"-repetitive. Were you to ever look for errors in your work, delete the word "sung".
As for the meaning of your work: be careful toying with it. Amelia Atwater-Rhodes wrote five books, entitled he "Kiesha'Ra" series. Book three speaks of Ecl, a void created by spirit, imagination, and other things with unimaginable densities. Look it up, if you wish. I shall not retype words of warning, and thus steal them from their original author.
5/8/2009 c1 Amarisu
The story of my life, literally. I am never one with reality. I think this is a very well written and vivid poem.
The story of my life, literally. I am never one with reality. I think this is a very well written and vivid poem.
5/7/2009 c1 7Ali-Kernschatten
I'm not much one for free verse, and I must admit that I've never had a dream quite like that, I thought the poem was well written. In just a few short lines you managed to pull me into the dream as well, and just as quickly pull me back out. Good job. :)
7Ali-KernschattenI'm not much one for free verse, and I must admit that I've never had a dream quite like that, I thought the poem was well written. In just a few short lines you managed to pull me into the dream as well, and just as quickly pull me back out. Good job. :)
5/1/2009 c1 2Sarthim
Dark and depressing on one level, but accessable just the same. Good job on questioning purpose and identity...it adds a lot of depth to your poetry.
2SarthimDark and depressing on one level, but accessable just the same. Good job on questioning purpose and identity...it adds a lot of depth to your poetry.
4/16/2009 c1 6Rae666
Hey! After receiving your PM about how you wrote poems about dreams, I had to check this out and I really liked it. I loved the descriptives you used - "Songs sung unvoiced", I loved that ^_^
6Rae666Hey! After receiving your PM about how you wrote poems about dreams, I had to check this out and I really liked it. I loved the descriptives you used - "Songs sung unvoiced", I loved that ^_^
3/29/2009 c1 HalfBloodPrincess
Very nice. I love how the surroundings are 'dreary' and 'tedious'. This has great subtle imagery, fantastically perplexing and extraordinarily wonderful. Loved it. Another favoutite.
bella
Very nice. I love how the surroundings are 'dreary' and 'tedious'. This has great subtle imagery, fantastically perplexing and extraordinarily wonderful. Loved it. Another favoutite.
bella
3/28/2009 c1 67Samurai-Soldier
Ha, very nice. To get it over with, you put "chocking", I think you meant "choking". Ok! It was very surreal and wonderous in it's imagery and deliverance, which is perfect for this dream. It was perplexing while being oddly straight forward as well, somewhat of a paradox found only in the mind. Very nice, Peace
67Samurai-SoldierHa, very nice. To get it over with, you put "chocking", I think you meant "choking". Ok! It was very surreal and wonderous in it's imagery and deliverance, which is perfect for this dream. It was perplexing while being oddly straight forward as well, somewhat of a paradox found only in the mind. Very nice, Peace