for Who will save me?8/12/2010 c1 
14Renana
I like how the message is clear so I have this image in my head while I'm reading :) The interesting part in this poem is how it started with something so pretty and ended with morbid detail. The transition was smooth :)
Anyway my favourite line was "A pool of crimson blood surrounding me" because I could just see some gray figure drowning in blood- eerie but it had impact.
Renana
14RenanaI like how the message is clear so I have this image in my head while I'm reading :) The interesting part in this poem is how it started with something so pretty and ended with morbid detail. The transition was smooth :)
Anyway my favourite line was "A pool of crimson blood surrounding me" because I could just see some gray figure drowning in blood- eerie but it had impact.
Renana
7/23/2010 c1 78Insanity Streak
I love the innocence within the poem. The start is so beautifully described, but then I feel so outraged at the girl's fate. You have described this story with perfect imagery. Job well done :)
78Insanity StreakI love the innocence within the poem. The start is so beautifully described, but then I feel so outraged at the girl's fate. You have described this story with perfect imagery. Job well done :)
3/28/2009 c1 12xCrazy
Wow, reading this, it is so TRUE. How people don't care whether or not you die, and they won't even help you because they are scared themselves. You really captured reality here, good job!
12xCrazyWow, reading this, it is so TRUE. How people don't care whether or not you die, and they won't even help you because they are scared themselves. You really captured reality here, good job!
3/26/2009 c1 11fortuna scriptor
WOW though simply written a powerful piece and like how natural it was and how inch by inch line by line your drawn in a little more good job keep writing!
11fortuna scriptorWOW though simply written a powerful piece and like how natural it was and how inch by inch line by line your drawn in a little more good job keep writing!