for Fire and the Furball12/26/2011 c13 Addy
I really enjoyed the scenes between Angel and the Leo. It seems like there's chemistry flowing between them but not with the human Renard, if that makes any sense. I was just wondering about who she falls in love with? The Leo or the human? Because you've separated them into different entities sharing the same body. Or am I just confusing myself? Keep up the good work n I'm looking forward to your updates.
I really enjoyed the scenes between Angel and the Leo. It seems like there's chemistry flowing between them but not with the human Renard, if that makes any sense. I was just wondering about who she falls in love with? The Leo or the human? Because you've separated them into different entities sharing the same body. Or am I just confusing myself? Keep up the good work n I'm looking forward to your updates.
12/26/2011 c14 Addy
Keep up the good work. I hoped to see an update soon.
Keep up the good work. I hoped to see an update soon.
12/5/2011 c13 
4Lady Katreina
It has been forever since I was last on Fictionpress and I am excited to say this is the first story I chose to read. Your writing style is fantastic, there are a few spelling errors but nothing to hinder the strength of your words. It has been a long time since I have been able to read romance but this is much better than that- it focuses on realistic reactions from someone who has a bit of oomph to reinforce her feelings.
After reading the first version I can appreciate this version so much better because I know what I hated in the last one is actually not a problem... n...n Thank you for writing and I hope to get back online soon to read and review.
4Lady KatreinaIt has been forever since I was last on Fictionpress and I am excited to say this is the first story I chose to read. Your writing style is fantastic, there are a few spelling errors but nothing to hinder the strength of your words. It has been a long time since I have been able to read romance but this is much better than that- it focuses on realistic reactions from someone who has a bit of oomph to reinforce her feelings.
After reading the first version I can appreciate this version so much better because I know what I hated in the last one is actually not a problem... n...n Thank you for writing and I hope to get back online soon to read and review.
5/3/2011 c13 6musicalfishieXD
Well I forgot my password for a fewHours so I don't remember everything I was going to say. I did just read both versions, and I read the original first. What I like better about the first one: the characters and how they interacted. In this one, the relationships between angi and renard and Angi and shateal are completely different. with renard I'm not sure which I like better, but I don't like the one with shateal, how it changed.
What I like better in this one: the detail. Its so much better. Its awesome. The background information is actually coming into it and making more sense. Some of the things that were wrong are fixed. The way you write has gotten better, more clear. For example, when you wrote about the halflings. In the first one, you never really explained it.
What I like about both: the ideas behind it. The plot.
What I don't like about both: you have a major typing problem. Sorry, but there are so many misspelled words theat sometimes I had to think about it for a second. I think that reading it out loud can help you fix these mistakes, I know it helps me when I'm trying to type. Also, a beta could help. I wouldn't change much, just the spelling.
Also, how are they communicating? You said this is 700 years ago. Even if she knew French, she wouldn't know old French. Think about how hard it is to read Shakespeare. That was only a couple hundred years ago. The differences would be huge.
This is one of my favorite stories now. Top 3 on fictionpress. And I've been on here for years. Good job and update soon.
6musicalfishieXDWell I forgot my password for a fewHours so I don't remember everything I was going to say. I did just read both versions, and I read the original first. What I like better about the first one: the characters and how they interacted. In this one, the relationships between angi and renard and Angi and shateal are completely different. with renard I'm not sure which I like better, but I don't like the one with shateal, how it changed.
What I like better in this one: the detail. Its so much better. Its awesome. The background information is actually coming into it and making more sense. Some of the things that were wrong are fixed. The way you write has gotten better, more clear. For example, when you wrote about the halflings. In the first one, you never really explained it.
What I like about both: the ideas behind it. The plot.
What I don't like about both: you have a major typing problem. Sorry, but there are so many misspelled words theat sometimes I had to think about it for a second. I think that reading it out loud can help you fix these mistakes, I know it helps me when I'm trying to type. Also, a beta could help. I wouldn't change much, just the spelling.
Also, how are they communicating? You said this is 700 years ago. Even if she knew French, she wouldn't know old French. Think about how hard it is to read Shakespeare. That was only a couple hundred years ago. The differences would be huge.
This is one of my favorite stories now. Top 3 on fictionpress. And I've been on here for years. Good job and update soon.
5/1/2011 c13 eddie
i liked the part where they were yelling back and forth. =)
i liked the part where they were yelling back and forth. =)
4/30/2011 c13 fi
this is my first review i found the story with 12 chapters. I was beginning if the story had been abandoned so i am glad to see that it is not. As for the shouting they are both being silly. they both saved each other call it even and be done with it, but it was great!
this is my first review i found the story with 12 chapters. I was beginning if the story had been abandoned so i am glad to see that it is not. As for the shouting they are both being silly. they both saved each other call it even and be done with it, but it was great!
4/29/2011 c13 3to fall or to jump
I loved it. I absolutely love the way you make the characters so real and believeable. Finally she gets to talk to his "demon" I like how she kept saying one wants to get away from her and the other can't get close enough. And of course, Shateal, always there to ruin the mood and add a little excitement :)
3to fall or to jumpI loved it. I absolutely love the way you make the characters so real and believeable. Finally she gets to talk to his "demon" I like how she kept saying one wants to get away from her and the other can't get close enough. And of course, Shateal, always there to ruin the mood and add a little excitement :)
4/26/2011 c13 starry eyez
I absolutely love the leo. I really do. Im really liking the re-write although I still like the original (typos and all) its one of my faves. The thing is its almost like reading a new story. I just wish the human Renard was less whiny and petulant. Im hoping he shows some redeeming qualities soon because he really pales compared to the awesomeness of the leo. I liked the banter back and forth. Excellent writing.
Cant wait for the next update!
I absolutely love the leo. I really do. Im really liking the re-write although I still like the original (typos and all) its one of my faves. The thing is its almost like reading a new story. I just wish the human Renard was less whiny and petulant. Im hoping he shows some redeeming qualities soon because he really pales compared to the awesomeness of the leo. I liked the banter back and forth. Excellent writing.
Cant wait for the next update!
4/26/2011 c13 laughing moon
AMAZING! I love this Chapter! and I'm dieing to know what rawsai Means! you must update as soon as possible or I might die from the Suspense! If I wasn't so lazy I would delete this all and rewrite it in all caps... but like i said I'm way to lazy... but please I am down on my knees begging You! and I really did like the scene where they argued back and forth I feel like it gave it a litte change of pace but it was a good change, and it was kinda funny, I just really liked it in general... and if u need anyone to bounce ideas off of I would be more then glad to be that someone =)
-cant wait till the next upload... thanks
AMAZING! I love this Chapter! and I'm dieing to know what rawsai Means! you must update as soon as possible or I might die from the Suspense! If I wasn't so lazy I would delete this all and rewrite it in all caps... but like i said I'm way to lazy... but please I am down on my knees begging You! and I really did like the scene where they argued back and forth I feel like it gave it a litte change of pace but it was a good change, and it was kinda funny, I just really liked it in general... and if u need anyone to bounce ideas off of I would be more then glad to be that someone =)
-cant wait till the next upload... thanks
4/25/2011 c13 bregrz
Hey there! I only just read your story for the first time today, and I really, really enjoyed it! You write really well. I am eager for more.
Sincerely,
Breanna G.
Hey there! I only just read your story for the first time today, and I really, really enjoyed it! You write really well. I am eager for more.
Sincerely,
Breanna G.
3/4/2011 c12 8DorkExpress
When never came back... poor dudes been waiting for months and you haven't written another chapter to say what's going to happen...
Come in! Please? I really want to know what's going to happen in the story!
XOXO
DE
8DorkExpressWhen never came back... poor dudes been waiting for months and you haven't written another chapter to say what's going to happen...
Come in! Please? I really want to know what's going to happen in the story!
XOXO
DE
12/2/2010 c12 ssmoochic
i find your humor very funny, and i absolutely love this rewrite. i think the story has more depth to it now. there are spelling mistakes and misused words in your chapters. nothing that i cant understand the point your making, you often write clam instead of calm. i think at one point you wrote that you were dyslexic but i'm not sure. your writing has improved a lot since the first furball. and i love ice king and can't wait till you bring it back. i think it deserves a rewrite like this one and i def want it to be a series. hey how about your next story be about the reaper, i think he deserves a lady too ;) thanks for writing, keep up the great work!
i find your humor very funny, and i absolutely love this rewrite. i think the story has more depth to it now. there are spelling mistakes and misused words in your chapters. nothing that i cant understand the point your making, you often write clam instead of calm. i think at one point you wrote that you were dyslexic but i'm not sure. your writing has improved a lot since the first furball. and i love ice king and can't wait till you bring it back. i think it deserves a rewrite like this one and i def want it to be a series. hey how about your next story be about the reaper, i think he deserves a lady too ;) thanks for writing, keep up the great work!