for SemiHopeful Masochist7/19/2009 c1 Moon
This poem is great, made more so by the fact that I can imagine it being totally realistic. I really appreciate the mention of the friend; it makes the story less depressing. This totally seems, however, exactly like a poem you would have to explicate in class. (That is a compliment, by the way - I mean to say that it's that professional and deep sounding.)
This poem is great, made more so by the fact that I can imagine it being totally realistic. I really appreciate the mention of the friend; it makes the story less depressing. This totally seems, however, exactly like a poem you would have to explicate in class. (That is a compliment, by the way - I mean to say that it's that professional and deep sounding.)
4/14/2009 c1 Ashi
Very good job! It is sufficently dark and hopeless, but the light at the tunnel that came with the end fit right it. The change was subtile and real, and the characters acted pleasingly human. Keep up the good work!
Very good job! It is sufficently dark and hopeless, but the light at the tunnel that came with the end fit right it. The change was subtile and real, and the characters acted pleasingly human. Keep up the good work!
4/6/2009 c1 
38AbsolutelyAbsent
Wow. That's a really great poem. I like that alot of the lines are near-rhymes, I have a thing for those... :) I especially like the last line of the 3rd stanza; I can picture very clearly the expression Katie must have been wearing. The whole thing is kind of harsh in its realism, but that's what makes it so great.
38AbsolutelyAbsentWow. That's a really great poem. I like that alot of the lines are near-rhymes, I have a thing for those... :) I especially like the last line of the 3rd stanza; I can picture very clearly the expression Katie must have been wearing. The whole thing is kind of harsh in its realism, but that's what makes it so great.