for And then there was yaoi7/26/2011 c1 
4Aspiemor
Well I decided to check this out. In some areas I found it rather graphic and I noticed you had a few errors such as spelling lighter as liter, but I wouldn't worry about it.
I rather liked the idea of being seperated from his mother. I guess it shows that evne though she had a happier new life, she didn't forget or forsake her previous child who represented that bad life. That was very sweet at the end how she embraced him. Although one wonders what his life will be like now?
Emotionally things were okay so good job on that. Yaoi isn't noramlly my thing but I am opened minded. If I get around to it I will check out the rest of the stuff you have posted.
4AspiemorWell I decided to check this out. In some areas I found it rather graphic and I noticed you had a few errors such as spelling lighter as liter, but I wouldn't worry about it.
I rather liked the idea of being seperated from his mother. I guess it shows that evne though she had a happier new life, she didn't forget or forsake her previous child who represented that bad life. That was very sweet at the end how she embraced him. Although one wonders what his life will be like now?
Emotionally things were okay so good job on that. Yaoi isn't noramlly my thing but I am opened minded. If I get around to it I will check out the rest of the stuff you have posted.
11/27/2010 c3 a person
come on! WRITE A NEW CHAPTER ALREADY! is so good
come on! WRITE A NEW CHAPTER ALREADY! is so good
7/20/2010 c3 a girl you don't know
hey wat's up? it is i again. love these yoai stories. i find this place by reading your profile. stories are awsome. PLEASE UPDTE. p.s.: CAN YOU ALSO UPDATE " GRACE ME, MY KING OF NIGHTS"
hey wat's up? it is i again. love these yoai stories. i find this place by reading your profile. stories are awsome. PLEASE UPDTE. p.s.: CAN YOU ALSO UPDATE " GRACE ME, MY KING OF NIGHTS"
7/15/2010 c3 a person
you are amazing.i love this yaoi.its my second time reading it. update soon please
you are amazing.i love this yaoi.its my second time reading it. update soon please
7/7/2010 c3 2Nixnight
I love Esliun! I like the way that the vampire chapter is progressing. Good work!
2NixnightI love Esliun! I like the way that the vampire chapter is progressing. Good work!
4/1/2010 c2 curiouseditor
very nice. great description in both sections. just a few typos, but i understand how it can be when you are typing so fast because your train of thought is flying away without you. your one shots are very good, have you ever thought of writing out a full length novel? i think you would do well to try sometime.
good luck!
very nice. great description in both sections. just a few typos, but i understand how it can be when you are typing so fast because your train of thought is flying away without you. your one shots are very good, have you ever thought of writing out a full length novel? i think you would do well to try sometime.
good luck!
11/29/2009 c1 person
Er. Typo:
He ran from that dreaded condom,
... I think you mean condo.
Er. Typo:
He ran from that dreaded condom,
... I think you mean condo.
8/11/2009 c1 20DevilPogoStick
Well, I decided to check this out and despite the fact I don't really read much Yaoi (I'm okay with it but rarely read one), I liked it, as it was well written and you are quite good at description.
This is one of those traits I lack a bit hence why I'm a script fic writer at heart.
Seriously though, you did a good job and keep up with writing.
(note: I also read chapter 2 and why I'm saying this now? Well...My name's also Dustin (whose mentioned and appears a bit on Chap 2). Thought that was amusing. :)
20DevilPogoStickWell, I decided to check this out and despite the fact I don't really read much Yaoi (I'm okay with it but rarely read one), I liked it, as it was well written and you are quite good at description.
This is one of those traits I lack a bit hence why I'm a script fic writer at heart.
Seriously though, you did a good job and keep up with writing.
(note: I also read chapter 2 and why I'm saying this now? Well...My name's also Dustin (whose mentioned and appears a bit on Chap 2). Thought that was amusing. :)
7/3/2009 c2 5TheLadyPendragon
The characters certainly were... quirky, to say the least. LOL, but I liked it. They were funny, as were there conversations. I like Robbie. He's very witty, even with a name like his. LOL, I didn't even get the pun until he spelled it out. -is slow-
5TheLadyPendragonThe characters certainly were... quirky, to say the least. LOL, but I liked it. They were funny, as were there conversations. I like Robbie. He's very witty, even with a name like his. LOL, I didn't even get the pun until he spelled it out. -is slow-
7/1/2009 c2 Reigh
This was really good! I like the cockiness of the main character and the punishment scene was great. The only thing, again, with penetration is that you need prep. Especially if the guy is as big as you described Eien to be. He should have at least worked a couple of fingers into Rob before putting it in. However, since it is a punishment scene, it could also remain the way you wrote it. Just remember for in the future.
~Reigh~
This was really good! I like the cockiness of the main character and the punishment scene was great. The only thing, again, with penetration is that you need prep. Especially if the guy is as big as you described Eien to be. He should have at least worked a couple of fingers into Rob before putting it in. However, since it is a punishment scene, it could also remain the way you wrote it. Just remember for in the future.
~Reigh~
7/1/2009 c1 Reigh
Looks like I got curious and couldn't help myself, lol. This is good. I really liked it. The only thing is that no matter how small the guy is, if you fuck him dry...it's gonna hurt the both of them. Men don't naturally lubricate, at all, so going in dry would hurt the other guy's penis. I suggest you at least have him slick himself with spit or something. But, it's still good! Moving on to the next chapter!
~Reigh~
Looks like I got curious and couldn't help myself, lol. This is good. I really liked it. The only thing is that no matter how small the guy is, if you fuck him dry...it's gonna hurt the both of them. Men don't naturally lubricate, at all, so going in dry would hurt the other guy's penis. I suggest you at least have him slick himself with spit or something. But, it's still good! Moving on to the next chapter!
~Reigh~
6/20/2009 c1 TheLadyPendragon
Aww, poor Cam! Those people suck for being so cruel to him - they should get sent to prison and be gang-raped! I don't want to be a bitch, but his mother shouldhave taken him with her instead of leaving. She knew she was being abused, so why didn't she call the cops to save her son after leaving? She left an abusive, lonely man with a child. I don't think she has the right to take him back. She doesn't deserve him. I like Reese, though. In fact, did I mention how much I like the names of the characters? Cam and Reese - aw, they sound like such a cute couple! I will definitely read more about them. ^^
Aww, poor Cam! Those people suck for being so cruel to him - they should get sent to prison and be gang-raped! I don't want to be a bitch, but his mother shouldhave taken him with her instead of leaving. She knew she was being abused, so why didn't she call the cops to save her son after leaving? She left an abusive, lonely man with a child. I don't think she has the right to take him back. She doesn't deserve him. I like Reese, though. In fact, did I mention how much I like the names of the characters? Cam and Reese - aw, they sound like such a cute couple! I will definitely read more about them. ^^
6/16/2009 c1 tai
ok, so i deffenty LOVED it. your an amazing writer, and i couldnt stop reading, wish it didnt end! its way better that some of the books ive read, and par with most of them, if not better! keep up the great work!
ok, so i deffenty LOVED it. your an amazing writer, and i couldnt stop reading, wish it didnt end! its way better that some of the books ive read, and par with most of them, if not better! keep up the great work!
6/15/2009 c2 9Narq
I really liked the start of this. you cut into the story nicely and the reader knew exactly what kind of person s/he was reading about and could relate totally.
Good story.
Narq.
9NarqI really liked the start of this. you cut into the story nicely and the reader knew exactly what kind of person s/he was reading about and could relate totally.
Good story.
Narq.
4/22/2009 c1 Chancee
This was really well written.
I am not into the whole yaoi thing, but I review all stories for their author's way of writing, not so much the subject matter. You wrote this in a tasteful way and the fact it is often not shared with the general public of males being raped, you took a step out from the norm and delivered a very moving and powerful piece.
Good job at being steadfast and writing something so compelling. I think that you captured all the emotions of Cam and certainly I was rooting for the father to die! I was so glad and I had even started talking to the screen for Cam to burn him in the tub. Yeah, it really did move me. I love your pace and intrigue and your descriptions are truly a work of art. The details set a great scene and this was such a joy to read.
I know you may not have many reviews, because of subject matter I'm sure, but I will definitely let all that I know to give this a read. This has the making of a beautiful love story, and I think you tell it well. This world is not full of all straight persons, and though I don't believe in the homosexual lifestyle, I will never say that those who are gay don't have the right to fall in love and have it told to the world. I am not to judge, that is for a higher power.
Over all an excellent story, one-shot or not, and I look forward to reading more of your work.
Momo~The Roadhouse
This was really well written.
I am not into the whole yaoi thing, but I review all stories for their author's way of writing, not so much the subject matter. You wrote this in a tasteful way and the fact it is often not shared with the general public of males being raped, you took a step out from the norm and delivered a very moving and powerful piece.
Good job at being steadfast and writing something so compelling. I think that you captured all the emotions of Cam and certainly I was rooting for the father to die! I was so glad and I had even started talking to the screen for Cam to burn him in the tub. Yeah, it really did move me. I love your pace and intrigue and your descriptions are truly a work of art. The details set a great scene and this was such a joy to read.
I know you may not have many reviews, because of subject matter I'm sure, but I will definitely let all that I know to give this a read. This has the making of a beautiful love story, and I think you tell it well. This world is not full of all straight persons, and though I don't believe in the homosexual lifestyle, I will never say that those who are gay don't have the right to fall in love and have it told to the world. I am not to judge, that is for a higher power.
Over all an excellent story, one-shot or not, and I look forward to reading more of your work.
Momo~The Roadhouse