
10/11/2009 c3
5eaststar
Great as always! Every time I reread something of yours, I discover something new!

Great as always! Every time I reread something of yours, I discover something new!
10/5/2009 c1
2Laurice Dairo
aw! you restarted the whole thing! too bad; i was really looking forward to it..but i do hope that you'll get to finish it...good luck!

aw! you restarted the whole thing! too bad; i was really looking forward to it..but i do hope that you'll get to finish it...good luck!
9/12/2009 c12
7feminista
i love your story so far! DON'T CHANGE A THING! you can always shift your focus in the next few chapters or alter your summary to fit your change in storyline.

i love your story so far! DON'T CHANGE A THING! you can always shift your focus in the next few chapters or alter your summary to fit your change in storyline.
9/11/2009 c12 hpswst101
Do what makes you feel comfortable. So if you need to re-work it, do so.
hpswst101
Do what makes you feel comfortable. So if you need to re-work it, do so.
hpswst101
9/11/2009 c12
2Laurice Dairo
If that story was without planning, i can't wait for the one that's been carefully thought over! First of all, i really love Anne and also Brent and Janell! Actually, I love all of them!
If i may make a suggestion about Edison and Monique?
Since Anne is such a spirited girl, and never actually listen's to whatever Brent says, you should use that. Since Brent told Anne that she's not allowed to see the prisoners, and Edison is really wounded and got Anne worried, Anne disobeys Brent and goes down and sees how Edison and Monique are doing; with Jason's help.
My thoughts about this scene is really long, but i think that you can manage from there. That is, if you consider my suggestion.
Anyway, best of luck on this story! It would be a shame if you abandon it because it really is a good story! I can't wait for you to finish it!
Good Luck!

If that story was without planning, i can't wait for the one that's been carefully thought over! First of all, i really love Anne and also Brent and Janell! Actually, I love all of them!
If i may make a suggestion about Edison and Monique?
Since Anne is such a spirited girl, and never actually listen's to whatever Brent says, you should use that. Since Brent told Anne that she's not allowed to see the prisoners, and Edison is really wounded and got Anne worried, Anne disobeys Brent and goes down and sees how Edison and Monique are doing; with Jason's help.
My thoughts about this scene is really long, but i think that you can manage from there. That is, if you consider my suggestion.
Anyway, best of luck on this story! It would be a shame if you abandon it because it really is a good story! I can't wait for you to finish it!
Good Luck!
9/10/2009 c12 Lilexchem
I feel if you think that your story can be stronger if you made your changes, then I say go for it. I love the story, and it deserves to be put in the best way possible. So I say go for the changes if you want to.
I feel if you think that your story can be stronger if you made your changes, then I say go for it. I love the story, and it deserves to be put in the best way possible. So I say go for the changes if you want to.
9/10/2009 c12
4Daphne.Claire
honestly anne needs to remain a he becuz the captain barely respects him as a boy, what luck would he have as a woman. further more she need to create a bond with the crew also before her gender is revealed otherwise they will toss her over board.

honestly anne needs to remain a he becuz the captain barely respects him as a boy, what luck would he have as a woman. further more she need to create a bond with the crew also before her gender is revealed otherwise they will toss her over board.
9/10/2009 c11
2Laurice Dairo
one of my faves! i just love it! i hope you'll get to finish it! oh please!

one of my faves! i just love it! i hope you'll get to finish it! oh please!