for Invisibly Shaken4/1/2009 c1 
5ShippoCY88
Wow! This is beautifully written! I can feel the pain you were trying to described; great job.
By the way, I'm just wondering... "...The priest was coming to give him his last rights! My grandpa getting his last rights!..." Do you mean, 'last rites' instead of 'last rights'?
Still, nice story! =) Keep it up!
5ShippoCY88Wow! This is beautifully written! I can feel the pain you were trying to described; great job.
By the way, I'm just wondering... "...The priest was coming to give him his last rights! My grandpa getting his last rights!..." Do you mean, 'last rites' instead of 'last rights'?
Still, nice story! =) Keep it up!